Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki kejelasan dan struktur jawaban: mulailah dengan kalimat topik yang jelas menjawab 'yes' atau 'no', lalu tambahkan 1–2 detail spesifik. Gunakan kata penghubung sederhana jika perlu. Contoh langkah-langkah: (1) Jawab langsung, (2) Jelaskan lokasi atau jenis bangunan, (3) Tambah satu detail nyata (mis. jarak atau fungsi).

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a new apartment complex and a school building about five minutes away by foot. These buildings are mostly residential and have modern glass facades.

提案: Buat jawaban lebih ringkas dan jelas: mulai dengan jawaban langsung (Yes/No), lalu beri satu alasan dan satu contoh sederhana. Gunakan kosakata relevan seperti 'architecture', 'design', atau 'photography'.

例: Not really, I don't take photos of buildings often. However, I sometimes photograph interesting architecture when I travel because I like the different designs and details.

提案: Perbaiki relevansi dan kelogisan: jawab dengan menyebutkan bangunan spesifik yang ingin dikunjungi, jelaskan alasannya, dan berikan satu detail yang membuat tempat itu menarik. Hindari kata yang tidak relevan.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Louvre Museum in Paris. I want to see its famous art collections and the glass pyramid entrance, which I’ve always found very impressive.

提案: Sampaikan pendapat yang jelas: jawab langsung (Yes/No/It depends), berikan alasan singkat, dan tambahkan satu contoh konkret (mis. pemandangan, kenyamanan, atau kebisingan). Gunakan struktur kalimat sederhana dan koheren.

例: It depends. I might like living in a tall building for the good views and amenities, but I would be concerned about noise and less outdoor space. For example, a high-rise apartment with a balcony and gym would be ideal.

× Yet there are suddenly following the latest and on my own flag, uh, with all the units from the obvious and in the apartment and schools building.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home now because of recent developments; they include apartment blocks and school buildings.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incoherent (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). It mixes unrelated phrases and lacks clear subjects and verbs. Suggestion: organize ideas into a clear subject and predicate, use linking words to show cause ('because of recent developments'), and list examples with parallel structure ('apartment blocks and school buildings'). Ensure tense and meaning match the question asking about current existence ('there are').

× Not very much, that's in puppet graphs also, but there is a lot of facts too building design different from the.

✓ Not very much. I sometimes take photos, especially of architectural details, because building designs vary a lot.

The original sentence has incorrect and unclear word choices and order (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'Puppet graphs' is incorrect and 'there is a lot of facts' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns ('photos', 'architectural details'), correct quantifier-noun agreement ('a lot of' + uncountable noun or 'a lot of' + plural noun), and use a clear clause to explain reason ('because building designs vary a lot').

× Bananas. And they usually have some beautiful markers, so.

✓ Yes, there is a famous building I would like to visit because it has beautiful architectural features.

The original reply is irrelevant and fragmented (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). 'Bananas' is unrelated; 'beautiful markers' is unclear. Suggestion: answer the question directly, name or describe the building, and explain why you want to visit using coherent clauses ('because it has...').

× The most cases are like. Sometimes I think that probably has been jobs.

✓ Sometimes I think living in a tall building is convenient because it is close to many jobs, but in most cases I prefer a low-rise house.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Phrases like 'The most cases are like' and 'probably has been jobs' do not form grammatical clauses. Suggestion: form complete sentences that directly address the question, contrast opinions ('but in most cases'), and use clear reasons ('close to many jobs').