Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に直接答えた後、理由を整理して簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。現在の答えは文法ミスや語順の乱れ（例："is there any tall building near my home?"）があり、語彙や表現も不自然です。改善ポイントは：1) トピック文で明確に答える（No, there aren’t.）。2) 接続詞（because, so, therefore）を使って理由を一文でつなぐ。3) 主語と動詞の一致、正しい語順に注意する。4) 5文以内に収める。

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. It’s a rural area, so most houses are low and there are small market shops instead. Because the neighbourhood is spread out, there’s little need for high-rise buildings.

提案: 話の主旨は伝わりますが、表現が不自然で語彙の誤用が目立ちます（"monetary"は不適切、"books my memory"など）。意見→理由の順で一貫して述べ、適切な語彙を使ってください。また冗長な表現を避け、論理的な接続語（for example, so, therefore）を使う練習をしましょう。

例: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings. I prefer to remember beautiful scenes in my mind rather than photographing them, so I rarely use a camera. For example, when I see a striking view I try to focus on the moment instead of taking a picture.

提案: 質問に直接答えていません（答えは写真について繰り返しています）。まずは“yes”か“no”を明確にしたうえで、訪れたい建物の具体例や理由を述べてください。もし訪れたい建物が特に無い場合でも、興味のあるタイプ（歴史的建築、現代建築など）を示すと良いです。語法や単語の誤用（"literally take photos at all"）も修正しましょう。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree because I’m interested in modern architecture and it offers great city views. If possible, I’d like to go to the observation deck and learn about its design and earthquake-resistant features.

提案: 主旨は明確で理由も適切ですが、語いの誤り（"deliver a tall building"）や語順の小さな不自然さがあります。より自然にするには短い主文で答え、'because'以下を一文で理由付けし、可能なら一つの具体的な例（避難の困難さなど）を加えてください。

例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building. Since Japan has frequent earthquakes, I’m worried about the safety and the difficulty of evacuating quickly from high floors during a quake.

× No, is there any tall building near my home? Because it's a rural area they have mostly low houses and then feeds more market shops where everyone go.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. Because it's a rural area, there are mostly low houses and more small market shops where everyone goes.

The original sentence misuses 'is there' and singular 'any tall building' when talking about absence of plural buildings; use 'there are/aren't' for plural existence (Grammar problem type 3). 'They have mostly low houses' incorrectly uses 'they' and present tense agreement; replace with 'there are mostly low houses' (Grammar problem type 27). 'Feeds' is incorrect word choice and form; 'and then feeds more market shops' is unclear—use 'and more small market shops' (word choice, sentence structure issue 26). 'Where everyone go' has subject-verb agreement error: 'everyone goes' (third person singular) (Grammar problem type 2/27). Overall, break into clear clauses and use 'there are' for existence, plural nouns, and correct verb agreement. Suggestions: Use 'there are'/'there aren't' for plural existence, match subject and verb ('everyone goes'), and avoid incorrect pronoun 'they' when referring to place—use 'there'.

× No, I don't like taking pictures of buildings. Actually I don't like taking photos, any of the things, because I'm kinda attracted to something monetary and when I see something really beautiful, I want to it books my memory with my brain and with my sense.

✓ No, I don't like taking pictures of buildings. Actually I don't like taking photos of anything, because I'm more attracted to memories; when I see something really beautiful, I want to keep it in my mind.

'Any of the things' is ungrammatical; use 'anything' (sentence structure issue 26). 'I'm kinda attracted to something monetary' is unclear and uses informal 'kinda' plus wrong meaning; likely intended 'more attracted to memories' or 'to keeping memories' (word choice/article issue 22/13). 'I want to it books my memory with my brain and with my sense' is ungrammatical—verbs and objects are misplaced. Use 'keep it in my mind' or 'store it in my memory' (Verb + -ing form and sentence structure 8/26). Suggestions: use 'anything', avoid informal 'kinda' in formal responses, and use clear verb phrases like 'keep in my mind' or 'store in my memory'.

× I don't usually take photos of buildings, I literally take photos at all because I prefer to keep beautiful scenes in my memory loaded and photograph them.

✓ I don't usually take photos of buildings; I literally don't take photos at all because I prefer to keep beautiful scenes in my memory rather than photograph them.

The phrase 'I literally take photos at all' is incorrect; negation requires 'don't' before the verb ('don't take photos at all') (There be issue combined with sentence structure 3/26). 'Prefer to keep beautiful scenes in my memory loaded' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'prefer to keep beautiful scenes in my memory' or 'rather than photograph them' (adjective/adverb and sentence structure issue 13/26). Suggestions: place negation correctly ('don't ... at all'), and use clear comparative phrasing 'prefer X rather than Y'.

× No, I don't want to deliver a tall building. I'm from Japan and because there are many earthquakes, I'm concerned about safety and worry it might be difficult to evacuate quickly if an earthquake happens.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building. I'm from Japan, and because there are many earthquakes, I'm concerned about safety and worry it might be difficult to evacuate quickly if an earthquake happens.

'Deliver a tall building' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'live in a tall building' (Verb + -ing/word choice issue 8). The rest of the sentence is acceptable but add comma for clarity. Suggestions: use the correct verb 'live in' when talking about residence; check verb collocations (e.g., 'live in a building', not 'deliver').