Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: まず質問に直接答える明確なトピック文（例：Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home.）を作ること。理由や意見を述べる際は根拠を一つか二つに絞り、具体例（どのくらい高いか、どの方向にあるかなど）を使い、つなぎ言葉（for example, because, however）で論理的に結ぶ。語順と単語選び（house price → housing prices、in the oven → incorrect）を正しくし、文は5文以内にまとめる。発音のための練習も必要。

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a new 30-storey office tower was built last year about a ten-minute walk away. I think these developments are mixed—on one hand they bring convenience and jobs, but on the other hand they can harm green spaces and increase noise. Overall, I feel the area is becoming more crowded and less quiet.

提案: まず直接的な肯定文（例：Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings.）を述べ、いつ・どのように撮るかを具体的に説明する。過去や習慣を表す語（used to, usually）を正しく使い、文法（keen on + -ing）と前置詞（from → from high viewpoints / in high-rise buildings）を修正する。例を出すなら時期と活動内容を明確に。答えは3〜4文で簡潔に。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings. I usually shoot from high viewpoints, such as rooftops or observation decks, to capture the whole skyline. When I was in high school, I often visited tall buildings to practice architectural photography with my friends.

提案: 質問に対して具体的な建物名や理由を述べる練習をする（例：Yes, I would like to visit Tokyo Skytree because...）。“building price”という表現は不自然なので入場料や宿泊費と言いたい場合はその語を使う。将来の計画は一文でまとめ、あまり冗長にしない。つなぎ言葉（because, however, so）を正しく使う。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree because I want to see the city view from the top. The admission fee is a bit expensive for me now, but I hope to go there in the future. Someday I would also like to live in a big city with many tall buildings.

提案: 明確な肯定から始め、理由を具体的に述べる（便利さ、景色、安全性など）。口語表現（wanna, celeb）を避け、formalな語彙を使う（want to, celebrity）。将来の願望は一文でまとめ、繰り返しを避ける。語順と文法（I will someday live → Someday I will live）を整える。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views and modern amenities. Although apartments in such buildings are expensive now, I hope to save enough money and move into one in the future. I dream of owning a stylish apartment similar to those seen in magazines.

× Yes I have because my house price is in the oven and umm recently Japanese government developed a lot of high building. But I think it is not good things, it's destroy environment.

✓ Yes, I do, because property prices near my house have gone up, and recently the Japanese government has developed many tall buildings. But I think this is not good; they harm the environment.

複数や不可算名詞の扱いと語順の誤りがあります。'have'だけでは意味が不明なので助動詞 'do' を用い、'house price is in the oven' は誤用で 'prices have gone up'（価格が上がった）に修正しました。'a lot of high building' は数の表現と可算名詞の複数形が必要なので 'many tall buildings' にし、'it's destroy environment' は動詞形と冠詞の誤りで 'they harm the environment' に修正しました。改善方法：名詞の可算/不可算を意識し、数量表現に合わせて単数/複数を整えること、意味が通らない直訳表現は避けること。

× Yes, because I'm I'm really keen on take a photo.

✓ Yes, because I'm really keen on taking photos.

'keen on' の後には動名詞 (-ing) が必要です。また 'take a photo' より一般的には複数形 'photos' を使います。改善方法：特定の表現（be keen on, enjoy, avoid など）の後に来る動詞形式を覚えること。

× I usually take photo from high building.

✓ I usually take photos from tall buildings.

単数/複数の一致と前置詞・形容詞の選択の誤りです。'high building' は英語では 'tall building' が自然です。複数の建物から撮るなら複数形にする必要があります。改善方法：形容詞のコロケーション（tall building）と複数形の一致に注意すること。

× For example when I was high school student I usually working in the building.

✓ For example, when I was a high school student I usually worked in the building.

過去の状態を述べているため動詞を過去形にする必要があります。'I was high school student' は冠詞が必要で 'a high school student' にします。また 'usually working' は進行形ではなく過去習慣の 'usually worked' が適切です。改善方法：過去の習慣は過去形で表現する、冠詞の有無を確認する。

× Yes I want, but the building, the building price is really expensive for us, so I cannot.

✓ Yes, I want to, but the building is really expensive for us, so I cannot afford it.

'I want' の後に不定詞が必要で、'the building, the building price' の繰り返しと不自然な表現を整理しました。'price is really expensive' は不自然で 'building is really expensive' または 'price is high' が適切です。加えて 'cannot' の後に目的語 'afford it' を加えました。改善方法：動詞の目的語を省略しない、重複を避けて自然な語順にする。

× But in the future I will. So someday I will be live in the big old city and big high.

✓ But in the future I will. Someday I will live in a big old city and in a tall building.

'will be live' は誤った未来形で、'will live' が正しいです。また 'big high' は意味不明なので 'tall building' に変更しました。前置詞 'in' を建物や都市に対して適切に付けました。改善方法：未来の行為には 'will' + 動詞原形、場所には適切な前置詞を使う。

× Yes, of course, but the building is really expensive for me. But I will someday I will live in the building and I wanna buy mansion like a celeb.

✓ Yes, of course, but the building is really expensive for me. Someday I will live in such a building and I want to buy a mansion like a celebrity.

二重の 'will' を整理し、口語的な 'wanna' を正式な 'want to' に直しました。'mansion like a celeb' は不完全な名詞句で 'a mansion like a celebrity's' や 'a mansion like a celebrity' が自然ですがここでは 'like a celebrity' を用いました。冠詞 'a' を 'mansion' に追加しました。改善方法：口語表現を控え、適切な冠詞と完全な名詞句を使う。