Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct plural and article errors (e.g. "I'm living" → "I live", "There are usually composed" → "They are usually made up"). Mention a precise example briefly.

例: Yes — I live in the city centre, so there are several tall buildings nearby. For example, many of them are mixed-use towers made up of condominiums, hotels and office space. One well-known example is the AC Tower, which houses a lot of call‑centre agents.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then add a specific reason with correct prepositions. Use linking words (for example, because) and avoid awkward phrases like "impressed of". Name the building correctly and describe what you like about it.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I'm fascinated by their structure and design. For example, I like taking pictures of the Petronas Twin Towers in Malaysia because of their symmetrical lines and reflective glass.

提案: Be more precise with nouns and tense, and organise ideas with a linking phrase. Say why you want to visit using a clear reason and a brief supporting detail. Correct terms (Taj Mahal is a mausoleum, not a palace) and use plural where needed.

例: Yes — I'd love to visit the Taj Mahal in India because I'm fascinated by its history and architecture. For example, I admire the story of Shah Jahan building the mausoleum for his wife, and I've heard from tourists that the craftsmanship and gardens are beautiful.

提案: Start with a clear stance and then give one concise reason linked with a connector like "because". Fix grammar ("in a tall buildings" → "in a tall building", "on the top of the floor" → "on the top floors"). Use concise vocabulary ("one- or two‑storey houses").

例: I don't mind living in a tall building, but I prefer low-rise housing because I feel anxious about being on the top floors during earthquakes. So I'd rather live in a one‑ or two‑storey house.

× Yes, I'm living in a city center so there are skyscrapers nearby.

✓ Yes, I live in the city centre, so there are skyscrapers nearby.

The present continuous 'I'm living' implies a temporary action; for permanent facts or habitual states we use the simple present 'I live'. Also 'city centre' is the usual noun phrase in English (Australia). Use 'the' before 'city centre' when referring to the specific place where you live.

× There are usually composed of condominiums, hotels and IT buildings.

✓ They are usually composed of condominiums, hotels and IT buildings.

The sentence begins with 'There are' but then tries to describe what 'they' are composed of; this creates a structure error. Replace 'There are' with 'They are' to refer back to the skyscrapers mentioned in the previous sentence. Alternatively, 'They are usually composed of...' correctly links subject and predicate.

× For example the famous AC tower which are home to call center agents.

✓ For example, the famous AC Tower, which is home to call centre agents.

The relative clause refers to 'AC Tower' (singular), so the verb should be singular 'is' not 'are'. Also add commas for the non-restrictive clause and capitalise 'Tower' if part of the name. Use 'call centre' in Australian English spelling.

× Yes, I love taking photos of buildings.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of buildings.

This sentence is correct. The verb 'taking' as a gerund correctly follows 'love'. No change is needed.

× I'm quite impressed of the structure and the design of most buildings.

✓ I'm quite impressed by the structure and design of most buildings.

The correct preposition with 'impressed' is 'by' (impressed by something), not 'of'. Also 'the design' can be simplified to 'design' to sound natural.

× For example, the twin towers in Malaysia are really like it.

✓ For example, I really like the Twin Towers in Malaysia.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and word order. To express personal preference, say 'I really like...' placing the subject 'I' before the verb. Also 'Twin Towers' is a proper noun and better capitalised; 'in Malaysia' stays as location.

× I am quite impressed with the story about how the king constructed the palace for his wife and also I heard a lot of interesting stories from the tourist who visited the place.

✓ I am quite impressed with the story about how the king built the palace for his wife, and I have also heard a lot of interesting stories from tourists who have visited the place.

Use 'built' or 'constructed' in simple past for a completed historical action; 'constructed' is acceptable but 'built' is more natural. 'I heard' should be present perfect 'I have heard' to connect past experiences to the present. Use plural 'tourists' for general people, and 'have visited' in present perfect for relevance to the present.

× I would love to visit Taj Mahal in India.

✓ I would love to visit the Taj Mahal in India.

Famous monuments typically take the definite article 'the' (the Taj Mahal). Use 'the' before the monument name.

× I don't mind living in a tall buildings, however when there are calamities like earthquakes I get scared when I'm on the top of the floor.

✓ I don't mind living in a tall building; however, when there are calamities like earthquakes I get scared when I'm at the top floor.

Mixing singular and plural: use 'a tall building' (singular) with 'a'. 'On the top of the floor' is awkward — use 'at the top floor' or better 'on the top floor'. Also add a semicolon or full stop before 'however' and commas for clarity.

× So I prefer to live in one or two-story building types.

✓ So I prefer to live in one- or two-storey buildings.

Use 'one- or two-storey buildings' to show choice between types; hyphenate compounds and use plural 'buildings' for general types. In Australian English, 'storey' is the correct spelling for floor levels.