Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and natural: state clearly whether there are tall buildings, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I live in a big city', 'many tall buildings'). Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a big city. For example, there are several office towers and high-rise apartment blocks within a ten-minute walk, so the skyline is quite dense.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give concise reasons and a brief example. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I really like taking photos of buildings', 'because I study architecture'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings because I study architecture. For example, I often take pictures during walks to study different styles and details, such as facades and materials.

提案: Answer directly which specific building you want to visit and give one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I want to visit X because...'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for instance'.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Guggenheim Museum in Bilbao because its unique curved forms and materials inspire my architectural studies. For instance, I want to study how the metal cladding affects light and color on the surface.

提案: Give a clear opinion and two specific reasons, using correct grammar (e.g., 'I would like to live in a tall building because I like the sunlight and the views'). Avoid unclear phrases like 'sun sunset tour buildings' and use linking words such as 'because' and 'so'.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it gets a lot of sunlight and offers great views. For example, watching the sunset from a high floor would be relaxing and provide a nice city panorama.

× Uh, in my hometown, very many tour buildings, like uh, because I'm live in big city.

✓ Uh, in my hometown, there are many tall buildings, because I live in a big city.

Error: pluralization and sentence structure. 'Very many tour buildings' is incorrect: 'very many' is awkward and 'tour' should be 'tall'. Also 'I'm live' mixes present continuous 'I'm' with base verb 'live'. Correct to 'there are many tall buildings' (use 'there are' for existence and plural noun) and 'I live' for simple present to state where you live. Suggestion: Use 'there is/there are' for stating existence and ensure adjective order and plural forms — 'many tall buildings' and 'I live in a big city'.

× Oh yes, I really like take part of buildings because my major is architecture.

✓ Oh yes, I really like taking pictures of buildings because my major is architecture.

Error: verb + -ing form needed after 'like' when expressing enjoyment; 'take part of buildings' is incorrect phrase. Use 'taking pictures of buildings' or 'photographing buildings'. Suggestion: After verbs like 'like', use the gerund ('taking'). Use correct noun phrase 'pictures of buildings' or 'photographs of buildings'.

× I'm very interesting many building types.

✓ I'm very interested in many building types.

Error: 'interesting' describes something that causes interest; the student needs the adjective 'interested' to describe their own feeling, and the preposition 'in' is required after 'interested.' Suggestion: Use 'interested in' + noun phrase: 'interested in many building types'.

× I'm usually take a picture walk on road.

✓ I usually take pictures while walking on the road.

Error: word order and missing prepositions. 'Usually take a picture walk on road' is ungrammatical. Correct structure: adverb + verb + object + subordinate clause or prepositional phrase: 'I usually take pictures while walking on the road.' Suggestion: Use plural 'pictures' if habitual, and include 'while' to link actions, or 'when I walk along the road.'

× I'm busy many buildings for my study.

✓ I've visited many buildings for my studies.

Error: incorrect verb choice and tense. 'I'm busy many buildings' is ungrammatical. The student likely means they have visited or studied many buildings; present perfect 'I've visited' fits ongoing experience. Also use plural 'studies' or 'my study' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use 'I've visited many buildings for my studies' or 'I study many buildings for my coursework.'

× I am interested in their materials and color.

✓ I am interested in their materials and colours.

Error: singular/plural consistency in 'color' with 'materials' — 'colours' (or 'colors' in American English) should match plurality; 'materials and colour(s)' is fine but plural 'colours' is more natural when referring to many buildings. Suggestion: Use consistent plural forms: 'materials and colours' (or 'materials and color' if treating colour as a general concept).

× I usually visit many buildings.

✓ I usually visit many buildings.

No grammatical correction needed. The sentence is grammatical but slightly repetitive; consider 'I often visit many different buildings' for variety. Suggestion: Optional stylistic improvement: 'I often visit many different buildings.'

× Yes, I think because I really like sunlight and sun.

✓ Yes, I think so because I really like sunlight and sunshine.

Error: repetition and word choice; 'sunlight and sun' is redundant. Use 'sunlight' or 'sunshine' for natural expression. Also add 'so' after 'I think' to complete the response. Suggestion: Say 'I think so because I really like sunlight' or 'I think so because I like sunshine.'

× Sun sunset tour buildings have a good scenery so I like inter.

✓ The sunset over tall buildings creates a beautiful view, so I like it.

Errors: 'Sun sunset tour buildings' is ungrammatical—likely many word errors: 'sunset over tall buildings' is intended. 'Have a good scenery' is incorrect collocation; use 'creates a beautiful view' or 'has a good view.' 'I like inter' is wrong: should be 'I like it.' Suggestion: Use correct noun phrases and pronouns: 'The sunset over tall buildings creates a beautiful view, so I like it.'