Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 発音の曖昧さと繰り返し（uh, we do not, any tall）が多く、文法ミス（"total ones", "we don't sell"）が見られます。まず短く明確な主文を言い切り、その後に1〜2の具体的な補足を加える練習をしてください。接続詞（because, so）を自然に使い、沈黙・埋め語（uh）を減らすために答える前に1秒考える癖をつけましょう。例："No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because it's mainly a low-density residential area with detached houses."のように。

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because it’s mainly a low-density residential area. For example, most properties here are single-family houses with small gardens, so the skyline is quite low.

提案: 流暢さが低く、反復やため言葉が多く、文の構成が不明瞭です。まず簡潔な主文（Yes/No + frequency）を言い、次に理由や具体例を1つ追加する練習をしてください。過去の経験を話すときは過去形を使い、表現は簡潔に。接続詞（especially, because, for example, last time）を使って論理を整えましょう。例："Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially iconic ones. The last time was when I visited Kyoto Tower three years ago."

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially ones that catch my eye. For example, about three years ago I photographed Kyoto Tower because its shape and lighting looked impressive at night.

提案: 内容は伝わるが、繰り返しと不要な語句が多く、文法ミス（"a lot of people's attention" fine but "it's drew" wrong）があります。まず明確な主文を提示し、次に1〜2の具体的な理由を述べてください。動詞時制と語順に注意し、関係代名詞の使い方を整えると良いです。接続語（First of all, because, so）を自然に使い、文は5文以内に収めましょう。例："One building I'd like to visit is Tokyo Skytree because it offers panoramic city views."

例: One building I’d like to visit is Tokyo Skytree. It was completed relatively recently and is famous for its observation decks, so I’d like to go up there to see panoramic views of the city.

提案: 理由は述べられているが、繰り返しと文法ミス（"it living", "a lot of earthquake", "I don't want to avoid"）が目立ちます。否定の主文を簡潔に言い、理由を一つか二つで具体的に説明しましょう。地震の頻度を示す語句（frequent earthquakes）や安全性に関する語彙を使うと説得力が増します。例："No, I wouldn't want to because my country has frequent earthquakes, so I'd prefer a low-rise house."

例: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because my country experiences frequent earthquakes. For safety and convenience, I’d prefer a low-rise house where evacuation would be easier.

× No, no, uh, OK. In, uh, we don't, we do not have any total ones in my, uh, near my, uh, in my neighborhood, because my area is, uh, residential area. So there are a lot of, uh, ordinary houses and uh, we don't sell. We do not have any tall, uh, any tall buildings, uh, nearby.

✓ No. We do not have any tall buildings in my neighborhood because my area is residential. There are a lot of ordinary houses nearby.

The original contains repetitions, fillers and awkward ordering that make the sentence unclear. Remove fillers (uh, um), avoid repeating the same idea, and place modifiers next to the nouns they describe. Combine short clauses for fluency (e.g., 'We do not have any tall buildings in my neighborhood because my area is residential'). Suggestions: practice forming concise sentences, omit filler words, and place adjectives before nouns ('residential area' -> 'my area is residential' or 'a residential area').

× Yeah, I sometimes I'll take photos, especially of, uh, building, uh, which, uh, which, uh, which I feel attracted uh, the last time I took a photo was uh, OK, Kyoto Tower and, uh, almost three, uh, several years ago and uh, uh, this was a fast ink, uh, first thing in first sight for me, so.

✓ Yes, I sometimes take photos, especially of buildings that I find attractive. The last time I took a photo was at Kyoto Tower several years ago; it was love at first sight for me.

Issues: incorrect verb forms and awkward adjective usage. Use simple present 'I sometimes take' rather than 'I'll take' for habitual actions. Use 'find attractive' (present participle not needed) or 'that I find attractive' rather than 'which I feel attracted'. Use 'several years ago' without 'almost three' unless specifying 'almost three years ago'. 'Love at first sight' is the correct idiom. Suggestions: learn common collocations ('find attractive', 'love at first sight') and use simple present for habits and simple past for single past events.

× Yes, uh, there are several building which I'd like to visit. First of all, I'd like to visit, uh, Tokyo Sky three, uh, which was, uh, which was, uh, you know, constructed, uh, a few years ago and, uh, it's drew a lot of, uh, a lot of people's attention. So in the near future I'd like to visit.

✓ Yes, there are several buildings I would like to visit. First of all, I'd like to visit Tokyo Skytree, which was constructed a few years ago and drew a lot of people's attention. I hope to visit it in the near future.

Problems: 'building' should be plural 'buildings' after 'several'. Remove redundant words and fillers. Use past simple 'drew' rather than 'it's drew'. Use correct name 'Tokyo Skytree'. Suggestions: check plural forms after quantifiers (several + plural), avoid unnecessary repetition, and match tense appropriately (simple past for completed actions).

× No, I do not want to live in a tall building because, umm, OK. No, uh, I think that, uh, it living in a tall building is very dangerous because, OK, uh, there are a lot of earthquake in my country, so I don't want to avoid, uh, living there.

✓ No, I do not want to live in a tall building because living there is dangerous. There are many earthquakes in my country, so I would prefer not to live in a tall building.

Issues: word order and redundancy ('it living' is incorrect), plural form 'earthquakes' needed, and the negative 'I don't want to avoid living there' is confusing (double negative). Use clear sentences: state the reason, then support it. Suggestions: remove fillers, use correct noun plurals, and avoid double negatives; say 'I would prefer not to...' for polite refusal.