Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and' or 'for example').

例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, mainly office blocks and hotels. For example, two large hotels and a recently built office tower are within a ten-minute walk, and many of them offer rooms for short-term lease.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer ('No, I don't'), then give one or two concise reasons using linking words ('because'/'so'). Avoid repetition and correct collocations (say 'interested in' not 'interested with').

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not interested in architectural design. Most buildings around me are quite ordinary, so I prefer photographing landscapes or people instead.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and add one specific reason why you want to visit, using a linking word such as 'because' or 'so'. Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating words.

例: Yes, I'd love to visit the famous World Trade Center in Indonesia because I'm curious about its architecture and the views from the observation deck. If I have enough time and budget, I would plan a trip to see the skyline and take photographs.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement ('No, I wouldn't like to') and give one specific reason. Correct sentences and avoid long hesitations. Use linking words ('because', 'so') and finish the thought (avoid leaving unclear fragments like 'living in a con').

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I have a fear of heights. For that reason, I prefer a low-rise house where I feel more comfortable and safe.

× Yes, there are buildings, uh, which are near to us and those buildings are for lease and some are motels or hotels that you can stay in when.

✓ Yes, there are buildings near us; some are for lease and some are motels or hotels where you can stay.

Use 'near us' not 'near to us' in this context; 'near' functions as a preposition that does not require 'to' when followed by a pronoun. Also replace 'that you can stay in when' with 'where you can stay' to correctly refer to places and remove the incomplete 'when'. Combine clauses for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Actually, no, because I'm not interested with with the design or the structure of that building.

✓ Actually, no, because I'm not interested in the design or the structure of the building.

The correct collocation is 'interested in', not 'interested with'. Remove the duplicated 'with' and use the definite article 'the' before 'building' if referring to a specific building mentioned earlier. This fixes preposition and article usage. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× It's not that very unusual.

✓ It's not very unusual.

The phrase 'that very' is redundant and unidiomatic here. Use 'not very unusual' to express moderate normality. This corrects awkward sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Like it's just it's just a simple building so I don't need to take pictures.

✓ It's just a simple building, so I don't need to take pictures.

Remove filler 'like' and duplicate 'it's just' to avoid repetition. Add a comma before 'so' to join the clauses correctly. This improves clarity and flow. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, I'd love to visit the the famous World Trade Center in Indonesia.

✓ Yes, I'd love to visit the famous World Trade Center in Indonesia.

Remove the duplicated 'the'. Using 'the famous' is correct for a specific well-known building; the duplicate is a typographical error. This fixes article duplication. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× If I have umm enough time and budget to go to Indonesia, I would definitely visit.

✓ If I have enough time and budget to go to Indonesia, I will definitely visit.

In a real conditional referring to a possible future event, use the present simple in the if-clause and 'will' in the main clause for a likely result. 'Would' is used for hypothetical or less likely situations or with past-tense conditionals. Remove filler 'umm'. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× I think I don't like to because I'm not really fond of, uh, high towers or umm, high buildings and I have fear of heights and I just want to like, umm, living in a con.

✓ I don't think I would like to, because I'm not really fond of high towers or tall buildings; I have a fear of heights, and I just want to live in a condo.

Change 'I think I don't like to' to 'I don't think I would like to' for natural modality. Use 'tall buildings' rather than 'high buildings'. Collocate 'have a fear of heights' with the article 'a'. Use 'want to live' not 'want to... living' (base form after 'want to'). 'Con' seems truncated—replace with 'condo' for 'condominium'. This addresses verb form, word choice, and sentence structure. Grammar problem type ID: 8