Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use plural/singular), avoid repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Include one specific detail and a linking word for coherence (e.g., “For example,”). Also correct tense and structures: say “I work on the 42nd floor” instead of “I'm walking on the floor 42.”

例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. For example, my office is in a high-rise and I work on the 42nd floor, which feels quite high and a little scary at times.

提案: Answer directly, avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “city skyline,” not “greetings”), and connect ideas with a linking phrase such as “because” or “so.” Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences and finish the thought fully.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings because Tokyo’s skyline is impressive. When I visit the city center, I often photograph interesting skyscrapers and street scenes to remember them.

提案: Give a specific building name if possible, or describe it clearly. Avoid hesitations and contradictory phrases. Use a topic sentence then one supporting detail (reason why). Keep it concise and grammatically correct.

例: Yes. I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world and offers spectacular views from its observation deck.

提案: Respond directly and give a clear reason with correct vocabulary (e.g., “I'm afraid of heights,” “I feel dizzy”). Avoid repetition and fillers. Use one or two supporting sentences with linking words like “because” or “however.”

例: Not really, because I am afraid of heights and often feel dizzy in very tall buildings. However, I can work in my tall office because I try to avoid looking out the windows too often.

× Yes, there is.

✓ Yes, there are.

The question asks about 'tall buildings' (plural). 'There is' is singular; use 'There are' for plural nouns to match number agreement.

× my office is very tall building.

✓ My office is a very tall building.

The noun phrase is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very tall building'. Also capitalize 'My' at the start. Use 'a' with singular countable nouns.

× I I'm walking on the floor 42, it is too high.

✓ I was on the 42nd floor; it felt very high.

Context refers to a past experience, so past tense 'was' and past feeling 'felt' are appropriate. Also use ordinal '42nd floor' and punctuation to separate clauses. Remove duplicate 'I'.

× It was a bit scary for me.

✓ It was a bit scary for me.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable as past tense describing a past feeling; no change needed.

× I sometimes take photos of greetings because there are many huge buildings in Tokyo, so that skyline is impressive.

✓ I sometimes take photos of buildings because there are many huge buildings in Tokyo, so the skyline is impressive.

'Photos of greetings' is incorrect; likely meant 'photos of buildings'. Use 'the skyline' not 'that skyline' when referring to a general well-known skyline. 'Because' clause and result clause are fine otherwise.

× And when I go to city area, I yeah, sometimes take photos of the.

✓ When I go to the city area, I sometimes take photos of them.

Add definite article 'the' before 'city area' and remove filler 'yeah'. 'Photos of the' is incomplete; replace with 'photos of them' or 'photos of the buildings' to complete the object.

× Yes, there are some for example, I want to visit uh, Dubai and I forgot the exact name, but I want to the tallest building in the world tourist tower in the world.

✓ Yes, there are some. For example, I want to visit Dubai and the tallest building in the world, the Burj Khalifa.

Run-on sentence with missing articles and unclear noun phrases. 'There are some' is vague but acceptable; split into sentences. Add 'the' before 'tallest building' and supply correct name 'the Burj Khalifa' for clarity. Remove redundant 'in the world' repetition.

× Yeah, it must be there.

✓ Yes, it must be there.

Minor: change 'Yeah' to 'Yes' for formality and clarity. 'Must be there' is acceptable to express assumption.

× Not really because I I'm scary if I go to a tall toll force.

✓ Not really, because I get scared if I go to a tall tower.

'I'm scary' is incorrect; use 'I get scared' or 'I am scared'. 'tall toll force' is garbled; likely 'tall tower'. Use commas for clarity.

× I tend to, uh, feel unwell when I go to building, but my office is very tall place.

✓ I tend to feel unwell when I go to a building, but my office is a very tall place.

Add 'a' before 'building' and before 'very tall place' for singular countable nouns. Remove filler 'uh' and keep present tense 'tend to feel' which matches habitual situation.

× So yeah, it is. It is.

✓ So yeah, it is.

Duplicate sentence 'It is.' is redundant. Keep a single clause for clarity and natural speech.