Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意语法和流利度。开头给出明确的主题句，然后用一两句具体细节补充，避免重复词语和语法错误。例如纠正单复数（skyscrapers）、删除重复词（and and）、以及澄清“on the floor”的含义（which floor）。可以用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home, including skyscrapers and office towers. However, I live on a lower floor, so I can't see many of them from my window. Overall, the area feels quite urban and busy.

提案: 回答自然但有重复和词语搭配问题。应避免填充词（uh, I, I）和重复表达（take photos... take the photos）。用更准确的词汇（architecture 而不是 architectures）并用连接词说明原因和频率。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings occasionally. I especially like capturing modern architecture and historic towers, and I often share my best shots on social media to preserve the memories.

提案: 回答有热情但表达不够准确且有重复。应直接给出主题句并用具体理由支持，避免重复词（see, see）和语法错误（the striking buildings）。可增加一两句具体期待做的事情以丰富内容。

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I have seen it many times in films and on social media, and its striking design fascinates me; I hope to go up to the viewing platform and take photos of the city.

提案: 回答观点明确，但有重复和语言不自然（offer me with; to exert some projects and act）。建议用更地道的表达说明原因并给出具体例子，如园艺、养宠物或 DIY 项目，使内容更具体且逻辑清晰。

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building. I prefer a house with a garden because it gives me more green space and freedom to do gardening, keep pets, or work on DIY projects outdoors.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings such as skyscraper and some official towers near my home.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings such as skyscrapers and some official towers near my home.

原句中“skyscraper”與“a lot of tall buildings”矛盾，因為前半句指多個建築，後面名詞應使用複數形式“skyscrapers”。建議：當指多個可數名詞時使用複數形式（如 skyscrapers）。

× Since I live in the city and and on on the floor of my home, I can't see a lot of tall buildings around there.

✓ Since I live in the city and on the upper floor of my home, I can't see a lot of tall buildings around here.

原句有重複詞“and and on on”，且“on the floor of my home”不夠具體，應改為“on the upper floor”或具體樓層。最後“around there”在此語境下更自然用“around here”。建議：刪除重複詞，明確樓層表達，並使用一致的指示詞。

× Yes, I'd like to take photos of buildings occasionally, especially take the photos of some modern architectures and historical towers and uh, I, I will share them on social media sometimes it's a nice way to memorize these things.

✓ Yes, I'd like to take photos of buildings occasionally, especially photos of some modern architecture and historical towers, and I will share them on social media sometimes; it's a nice way to remember these things.

原句中“especially take the photos of”結構不自然，應使用名詞短語“especially photos of...”。“architectures”用法不對，應用不可數名詞“architecture”。“memorize”用於記憶具體事實，不適合此處，應改為“remember”。建議：用名詞短語替代冗餘動詞，注意不可數名詞用法，選擇恰當動詞。

× So it's the striking buildings really attract me.

✓ So it's the striking building that really attracts me.

原句結構混亂，使用了“It’s ... that”強調結構時，後面應為單數“building”或將整句改為複數並調整動詞。若保留“It’s ... that”且指單一事物，動詞需用第三人稱單數“attracts”。建議：確定強調對象的數，並使動詞與主語一致。

× So I will visit.

✓ So I will visit it.

雖然“will visit”時態本身正確，但缺少明確賓語，應補上“it”來指代前文的 Eiffel Tower，句子更完整。建議：在表示訪問某物時加上賓語代詞或名詞。

× Honestly speaking, I don't like to live in a tall building because I prefer living in houses with garden because it can offer me with more green space and freedom to to exert some to exert some projects and act.

✓ Honestly speaking, I don't like living in a tall building because I prefer living in houses with gardens because they can offer me more green space and the freedom to carry out some projects and activities.

原句中有重複“to to exert some to exert some”，且“prefer living in houses with garden”中“garden”應為複數“gardens”或用不可數時重構。“offer me with”是不正確搭配，正確為“offer me”或“provide me with”。“exert”動詞用法不當，應用“carry out”或“do”，並把“act”改為“activities”。建議：刪除重複詞，使用正確搭配（provide/offer），選擇合適動詞短語表達“做項目/活動”。