Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid filler sounds. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct noun forms and verb tenses (e.g., 'a residential area', 'low-rise buildings', 'detached houses').

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a quiet residential area with mostly low-rise, detached houses, so it’s much calmer than the city centre.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct word choice (e.g., 'photos of buildings', not 'photo of meetings'). Use linking words to explain why and give a specific example. Reduce hesitation and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings, especially famous or unusual ones, because their architecture is interesting and photogenic. For example, I often photograph old temples with intricate details.

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct response and avoid confusing location. State the building’s name and explain why you want to visit with one or two specific reasons. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I would like to visit Taipei 101 in Taiwan. It’s an iconic skyscraper famous for its design and observation deck, so I want to go to enjoy the panoramic city views and learn about its architecture.

提案: Be concise and avoid fillers; correct awkward phrasing. Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons using linking words. Mention concrete benefits or concerns (views, convenience, noise) to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building at least once in my life because I could enjoy amazing views from the windows and the convenience of amenities like a gym and elevator. However, I might be worried about higher costs and possible noise from neighbours.

× No, because I live in residential area with uh low low low rise building.

✓ No, because I live in a residential area with low-rise buildings.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'residential area' (article error, ID 22). Also 'low low low rise building' should be 'low-rise buildings' to show plural and correct hyphenation; the original mixes singular/plural (IDs 1 and 22). Use 'low-rise buildings' to indicate there are multiple buildings and add 'a' before 'residential area' for grammatical completeness. Suggestion: Say 'I live in a residential area with low-rise buildings.'

× Most are detached house.

✓ Most are detached houses.

The subject 'Most' refers to multiple items, so the noun must be plural. Use 'houses' not 'house' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). Also 'detached houses' is the correct noun phrase for multiple dwellings. Suggestion: Use 'Most are detached houses.'

× It was. It is quiet and uh very peaceful as compared to the uh area full of buildings.

✓ It is quiet and very peaceful compared to areas full of buildings.

Fragment 'It was.' is unnecessary and breaks sentence flow (sentence structure error, ID 26). 'As compared to the uh area full of buildings' is awkward; use 'compared to areas full of buildings.' Maintain present tense 'is' to match current state (present tense issue, ID 6). Remove fillers for clarity. Suggestion: 'It is quiet and very peaceful compared to areas full of buildings.'

× Yes, I like taking photo of meetings, particularly in UH, particularly the, uh, famous or unusual one because their architecture is interesting and photogenic.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings, particularly the famous or unusual ones, because their architecture is interesting and photogenic.

Several issues: 'taking photo' should be plural 'taking photos' (singular/plural issue, ID 1). 'meetings' seems incorrect in context; likely 'buildings' is intended (word choice, but treated here as sentence correction). 'in UH' is unclear and removed. 'famous or unusual one' should be plural 'ones' to agree with 'buildings' (singular/plural, ID 1). 'their' correctly refers to plural 'buildings'. Use plural forms consistently. Suggestion: 'I like taking photos of buildings, particularly the famous or unusual ones.'

× Yes, there is a, we call it 101 tower in Thailand.

✓ Yes, there is one we call 101 Tower in Taiwan.

Pronoun and noun reference confusion: 'there is a, we call it 101 tower in Thailand' mixes articles and location. Use 'one' to refer to 'a building' and place the proper name '101 Tower' with correct location 'Taiwan' (the student later mentions Taiwan). Also capitalize proper noun 'Tower'. This fixes pronoun/reference issues and location accuracy (incorrect use of pronouns, ID 12). Suggestion: 'Yes, there is one we call 101 Tower in Taiwan.'

× I've never been to Taiwan before and uh, the building it and it did.

✓ I've never been to Taiwan before, and I haven't seen the building in person.

The original mixes tenses and has fragments 'the building it and it did' which are ungrammatical (present tense issue, ID 6; sentence structure, ID 26). Use present perfect 'haven't seen' to match 'I've never been to Taiwan before.' Clarify the intended meaning: the speaker has not visited Taiwan nor seen the building. Suggestion: 'I've never been to Taiwan before, and I haven't seen the building in person.'

× The 101 tower is the is an iconic building in Taiwan and the more popular 1.

✓ The 101 Tower is an iconic building in Taiwan and is very popular.

Article misuse and redundant words: 'the is an' is incorrect (article error, ID 22). 'the more popular 1' is ungrammatical; use 'very popular' or 'one of the most popular' (sentence structure error, ID 26). Also capitalize 'Tower' and avoid unnecessary numerals. Suggestion: 'The 101 Tower is an iconic building in Taiwan and is very popular.'

× So I at least I want to experience one to go.

✓ So I would like to visit it at least once.

Awkward word order and redundancy: 'So I at least I want to experience one to go' is ungrammatical (sentence structure error, ID 26). Use conditional/modal 'would like' to express desire and 'visit it at least once' to convey intent clearly (modal verb usage, ID 4). Suggestion: 'So I would like to visit it at least once.'

× Yes, I do probably once in a lifetime because I want to experience, uh, living in, uh, a tall building with when I wake up, I can see a view from the top sky and also, uh, witness, uh, iconic the sin sin Sinner, the.

✓ Yes, I probably would, at least once in my life, because I want to experience living in a tall building where I can see the view from above and also see iconic sights.

Word order and modal use: 'I do probably once in a lifetime' is incorrect; use 'I probably would, at least once in my life' (modal verb usage, ID 4). Remove fillers and correct clause 'with when I wake up' to 'where I can' or 'when I wake up I can'. 'the top sky' is unidiomatic; use 'from above' or 'from the top.' The ending 'witness, uh, iconic the sin sin Sinner, the' is unintelligible; replace with 'see iconic sights.' Suggestion: 'Yes, I probably would, at least once in my life, because I want to experience living in a tall building where I can see the view from above and see iconic sights.'