Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct grammar (e.g., 'I live in a suburb' → 'I live in a suburb of Ahmedabad'), use singular/plural correctly, and limit to 2–3 supporting details. Use linking words like 'and' or 'for example' if needed.

例: Yes. I live in a suburb of Ahmedabad, and there are several tall high-rise buildings near my home. For example, many of them have more than ten floors and feature modern glass facades, which makes the area look quite attractive.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., 'I like taking photos'), remove fillers, and provide one or two concise supporting reasons or an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for instance' to connect ideas and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of buildings because I am interested in architecture and photography. For instance, I often photograph the facades and rooftops of modern high-rises because their shapes and reflections look very artistic.

提案: Respond with a clear topic sentence and accurate facts. Avoid incorrect numbers and be concise. Use linking words to add one reason why you want to visit (e.g., 'because' or 'because of'). Fix grammar and country name: 'United Arab Emirates'.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because it is the tallest building in the world. I am fascinated by its futuristic design and would love to see the observation deck for panoramic views of the city.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and provide two concise, specific reasons joined with linking words like 'because' and 'also'. Correct phrasing (e.g., 'on the top floor', 'enjoy sitting on the balcony') and avoid vague claims like 'you will have a lot of time'.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the top floors offer beautiful city and sunset views. Also, sitting on a balcony would be a pleasant way to relax and spend time with family and friends.

× Yes, I am living a suburb area of Ahmedabad and there are many tall high rise building near my house and uh, mostly the building has more than 10 floors and it looks so very beautiful because it's modern infrastructure and elevation and their glass architecture.

✓ Yes, I live in a suburban area of Ahmedabad and there are many tall high-rise buildings near my house; most of the buildings have more than 10 floors and they look very beautiful because of their modern infrastructure, elevation, and glass architecture.

Errors: incorrect present progressive for a permanent state, wrong article and adjective form, singular/plural mismatches, incorrect possessive pronoun. Suggestions: Use simple present 'I live' for habitual or permanent situations; use 'a suburban area' or 'in a suburb' for correct noun phrase; use 'high-rise buildings' plural to match 'many'; match subject and verb number ('most of the buildings have'); use 'they' and 'their' to refer to the buildings; use 'because of' to link reason. ID:6

× Yes, I really like to taking photo of buildings because I uh, enjoy photography and I specially take a photo OPS high top and, uh, look in a a modern infrastructure building.

✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of buildings because I enjoy photography, and I especially take photos from high points and look at modern buildings.

Errors: incorrect infinitive+ing ('like to taking') and wrong noun forms. Suggestions: After 'like' use gerund 'taking'; plural 'photos' for general activity; 'especially' spelled correctly; use 'take photos from high points' or 'from the top' and 'look at modern buildings.' ID:8

× Uh, it really make me more enjoyable and uh, creative activity.

✓ It really makes me enjoy myself more and is a creative activity.

Errors: subject-verb agreement and incorrect adjective/adverb use. Suggestions: Use third person singular 'makes' to agree with 'it'; use 'enjoy myself' rather than 'enjoyable' in this structure; rephrase to 'is a creative activity' for clarity. ID:6

× Yes, I really want to visit the building called Burj Khalifa which is located in United Arab Amirad in Dubai and it's a world tallest building ever.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit the building called the Burj Khalifa, which is located in the United Arab Emirates in Dubai, and it's the tallest building in the world.

Errors: missing definite articles and incorrect country name and superlative structure. Suggestions: Use 'the Burj Khalifa' and 'the United Arab Emirates'; use 'the tallest building in the world' for correct superlative phrasing. ID:22

× It has almost 100 and 51165 floors and it looked like very futuristic and.

✓ It has almost 160 floors and it looks very futuristic.

Errors: nonsensical floor number and tense mismatch. Suggestions: Use a realistic number (Burj Khalifa has 163 floors above ground, often said 'around 160'); use simple present 'looks' for description; remove trailing 'and.' ID:1

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because at the top floor you can see the beautiful view of the city and also the sunset.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because from the top floor you can see beautiful views of the city and the sunset.

Errors: preposition use and singular/plural noun choice. Suggestions: Use 'from the top floor' not 'at', and plural 'views' or 'a beautiful view'; keep 'the sunset' is acceptable. ID:6

× You can also enjoy to sit at the balcony of the building and you will have a lot of time to spend with your family and friends it make more connection.

✓ You can also enjoy sitting on the balcony of the building, and you will have a lot of time to spend with your family and friends; it will help you build closer connections.

Errors: incorrect verb form after 'enjoy', wrong preposition for 'balcony', run-on sentence, subject-verb agreement, and awkward phrasing. Suggestions: Use gerund 'sitting' after 'enjoy'; use 'on the balcony'; split into two clauses and use 'it will help you build closer connections' for clear meaning and correct verb agreement. ID:11