Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答题要更简洁并注意语法与词汇使用。可先用一句主题句直接回答，然后用1–2句具体细节支持。注意单数复数和拼写（例如“high-rise apartments”，“tower”或“towel”应为“tower”错误），避免冗长的从句。可用连接词如“also”或“for example”使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the city. For example, my neighborhood has high-rise apartments, office towers and a shopping mall, which makes the area feel modern and lively.

提案: 注意用词和句子结构，先直接回答，然后说明原因和具体做法。修正动词和名词形式（例如“love photographing buildings”，“shoot them with a drone”，“tall structures”），并用连接词如“but”或“so”让叙述更连贯。避免信息堆砌，控制在最多五句内。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings and used to shoot them with a drone because it gave much better angles. However, since drones were banned in my city, I now use nearby rooftops or tall structures to capture architectural photos, especially at night when the lights look dramatic.

提案: 回答应更明确并修正语法。先用一句话概括立场，然后用一两句具体说明原因并举例。注意名词单复数和从句的搭配（例如“those interesting museums and churches have cultural significance”）。可使用连接词如“however”或“on the other hand”。

例: If you mean skyscrapers, I would probably not visit their interiors because I prefer how they look from outside. However, I would like to visit interesting museums and historic churches because they have cultural significance and often contain fascinating exhibits.

提案: 需要修正表述并提供更清晰的原因。先直接回答，然后用1–2句说明具体经历与感受。注意重复（“by the coast”重复）和词汇错误（“towels”应为“towers”），以及形容词搭配（“felt structurally unsafe”）。使用连接词如“because”或“so”保持逻辑。

例: No, I don't want to live in a tall building. When I was growing up we moved a lot and I felt uneasy living in high-rise towers by the coast because strong winds made the towers sway, so I often felt structurally unsafe.

× my neighborhood has a lot of high rise apartment, office, towel and even a shopping mall in the skyscrapers, making the whole neighborhood really modern and lively.

✓ my neighborhood has a lot of high-rise apartments, offices, hotels and even a shopping mall in the skyscrapers, making the whole neighborhood really modern and lively.

错误类型：可数名词单复数使用错误。原句中 apartment、office、towel（应为 hotel）用单数，且拼写错误，且在列举多个项目时应使用复数形式。建议：当表示“不止一个”或“许多”时，可数名词要用复数；注意拼写（towel→hotel）；复合形容词 high-rise 用连字符。

× Yes, I love photographer in buildings and I used to show them with a drone because it gave so much better angles.

✓ Yes, I love photographing buildings and I used to shoot them with a drone because it gave much better angles.

错误类型：词类使用错误。原句用 photographer（名词）错误地代替了动名词 photographing；show 用法不当，应为 take/shot 表示拍摄；so much better 结构搭配不自然，应为 much better。建议：使用动名词 photographing 表示“拍摄”；用 take/shot 表示拍照片；注意副词搭配。

× However, our city recently banned personal drone use so now I climb nearby rooftops or tall structure to take architectural photos, especially at night the lights.

✓ However, our city recently banned personal drone use, so now I climb nearby rooftops or tall structures to take architectural photos, especially at night when the lights are on.

错误类型：There be / 句子结构与从句缺失问题。原句 structure 单数/复数不一致（structure→structures），并且‘especially at night the lights’ 缺少连接词和谓语，需改为 when the lights are on。建议：保持主谓一致并补全时间从句，使句子完整流畅。

× If you are talking about some skyscrapers, I would probably say no because I think they look better on the outside instead of the inside.

✓ If you are talking about skyscrapers, I would probably say no because I think they look better on the outside than on the inside.

错误类型：代词/连词或比较结构使用不当。原句用 instead of 比较外观与内部，不符合比较两者优劣的表达，应该用 than 并且明确两者的比较对象（on the outside vs on the inside）。建议：比较级比较两项时用 than，并保持比较对象平行。

× And if you're talking about those interesting museum and those church has its cultural purpose, I would say yes.

✓ And if you're talking about interesting museums and churches that have their cultural purposes, I would say yes.

错误类型：代词和主谓一致问题。原句 museum、church 用单数且搭配 those（复数）不一致；has its 用法也与复数主语不匹配且代词 its 不明确，应改为 have their。建议：保持数的一致性，复数指代用复数动词和复数物主代词。

× That's a definite no. When I was growing up my family moved frequently and I remember feeling uneasy living in high rise buildings by the coast by the coast because strong sea winds made the towels sway.

✓ That's a definite no. When I was growing up my family moved frequently and I remember feeling uneasy living in high-rise buildings by the coast because strong sea winds made the towers sway.

错误类型：第三人称单数/拼写及词义错误。原句重复了 by the coast，两处重复；towels 拼写错误且语义不合（应为 towers 指高楼）；high-rise 需连字符。建议：删除重复片段，纠正拼写并确保词义准确。

× So I often felt structural unstable and unsafe.

✓ So I often felt structurally unstable and unsafe.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用错误。原句用 structural（名词性/形容词）修饰 unstable 不恰当，应使用副词 structurally 修饰形容词 unstable。建议：当一个词修饰形容词或副词时，通常使用副词形式（-ly）。