Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether there are tall buildings, then give one or two specific details (name, location, size) using correct grammar and word order. Avoid mixing unrelated phrases and check singular/plural and prepositions (e.g., “in southeast China” → “in the southeast of China” or “in southeast China” depending on context).

例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home. One notable example is Trans Towers, a 100‑storey building about 200 metres away in the southeast of the city.

提案: Organize your answer: give a clear yes/no, then explain why and add one specific example. Use correct nouns and possessives, and avoid filler words. Describe when and what you photograph, and use simple linking words such as 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially at night, because the city lights look beautiful. For example, during the Spring Festival I visited a tall tower three times to photograph the evening skyline.

提案: Give a direct answer naming the building, then add one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Correct grammar for relative clauses and prepositions (e.g., 'which is located in Shanghai' and 'visit the tower this year'). Keep sentences short and clear.

例: Yes. I would like to visit the Shanghai Mingzhu Tower, which is located in Shanghai. I want to go because the tower offers panoramic views of the city and I plan to visit it later this year.

提案: Answer directly and clearly whether you would like to live in a tall building, then give one or two reasons and a comparison. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., 'toilet' → 'tall') and fix articles and plural forms. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to compare options.

例: I would prefer to live in a tall building if it is close to my workplace because it is convenient. However, if that is not possible, a three‑ or four‑storey building would be better because it feels quieter and more comfortable.

× Yes, there's a tall building, police buildings in southeast China.

✓ Yes, there's a tall police building in southeast China.

The original mixes singular 'there's' with a plural phrase and misorders nouns. Use 'there's' with a singular noun phrase and place the adjective before the noun: 'a tall police building.'

× We called Trans Towers, which in 200 meters and have 100 floors.

✓ We call it Trans Towers; it is 200 meters tall and has 100 floors.

The sentence uses past tense 'called' inconsistently and omits verbs for location and height. Use present simple 'call' for a general name, include 'is' for height and 'has' for possession. Also use '200 meters tall' to describe height and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it has 100 floors').

× Yeah, I think so much photos of Sean's showers like especially in the night because from the tower has a gorgeous scene in the evening.

✓ Yeah, I take a lot of photos of city skyscrapers, especially at night, because the view from the tower is gorgeous in the evening.

'So much photos' is incorrect; use 'a lot of photos' or 'many photos.' The original also has wrong nouns ('Sean's showers' likely misheard) and missing subject for 'has.' Rephrase to 'the view from the tower is gorgeous' to be clear and grammatically correct. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× Uh, during the Spring Festival vacation, I visited John's tower for nearly three times and take.

✓ During the Spring Festival vacation, I visited John's tower nearly three times.

Use past simple 'visited' for completed actions; do not mix with present 'take.' 'For nearly three times' is ungrammatical; use 'nearly three times.' Remove the extra verb 'take.'

× Yeah, my favorite building in China is Shanghai Mingzhu Tower, which located in Shanghai and is also my favorite city.

✓ My favorite building in China is Shanghai Mingzhu Tower, which is located in Shanghai, my favorite city.

The relative clause needs the verb 'is located.' Also combine ideas efficiently: 'which is located in Shanghai, my favorite city.' This fixes the missing verb in the clause.

× So I think I will go to visit Shanghai into Tower this year.

✓ So I think I will visit Shanghai Mingzhu Tower this year.

Use future simple 'will visit.' Remove unnecessary preposition 'into' and correct the building name order to 'Shanghai Mingzhu Tower.' Keep verb placement simple: 'will visit [place].'

× If I live in a toilet building in the nearest buildings I I think is a best choice, but if not I think of a three floor or 4 floors buildings is a better choice.

✓ If I could live in a tall building nearby, I think it would be the best choice; otherwise, I think a three- or four-story building would be better.

The original has several errors: 'toilet building' and 'nearest buildings' are incorrect words and order; probably meant 'tall building nearby.' Use conditional structure 'If I could live...' and 'would be' for hypothetical preference. Use 'three- or four-story building' for correct adjective form and singular agreement. Remove repeated 'I' and fix article usage and word order.