Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly address the question first, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating location phrases and ensure sentences are grammatically correct. Use a linking word to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. However, my neighborhood is mainly residential, and there is a large park beside my house, so it remains quite peaceful.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and correct grammatical errors. Use linking words to structure the answer and avoid repetition. Pay attention to verb forms and article use (a/the) and adjective order.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially when I travel, because I appreciate architectural details. For example, I love photographing old brick churches since their textures and historical features fascinate me.

提案: Answer directly, then add specific details and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and word order). Use one linking phrase to connect ideas and include a brief reason why you want to visit.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the University of Sydney because it has many beautiful old brick buildings. I enjoy walking around the campus to admire the architecture and imagine the university's history.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then provide two specific reasons. Correct unclear nouns (e.g., 'two-story breakfast' seems incorrect) and remove filler words like 'uh' and 'simply.' Use linking words to make reasons coherent.

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building because I love my current home. It is a comfortable two-story house, and I can enjoy a lovely view of the landscape from my windows.

× My favorite building is is old one made by a brick.

✓ My favorite building is an old one made of brick.

Use singular/plural and articles correctly: 'is is' has a duplication and should be single 'is'. 'an' is required before a vowel-starting adjective 'old'. Use 'made of brick' not 'made by a brick' because materials use 'made of' and 'brick' can be uncountable when referring to material.

× So I love take photos of old church made by bricks because it always fascinate.

✓ So I love taking photos of old churches made of brick because they always fascinate me.

After 'love' use the gerund 'taking'. 'Old church' should be plural 'old churches' if speaking generally. Use 'made of brick' for material. 'Fascinate' needs a subject-verb agreement: 'they fascinate me' or 'it fascinates me' with singular; here plural 'they' plus object 'me' is natural.

× It always makes me fascinate.

✓ It always fascinates me.

Incorrect verb form: 'makes me fascinate' is wrong. Use the active verb 'fascinates' with the experiencer 'me' as object: 'It fascinates me' or 'It always fascinates me.'

× This university have a lot old beautiful buildings made of brick.

✓ This university has a lot of old, beautiful buildings made of brick.

Subject-verb agreement: 'university' is singular so use 'has' not 'have'. Also include 'a' in 'a lot of' and commas between adjectives 'old, beautiful'.

× I also love to walk around in the university.

✓ I also love to walk around the university.

Preposition choice: 'walk around in the university' is acceptable but more natural is 'walk around the university' or 'walk around on campus'. Removing 'in' yields a more idiomatic phrase.

× I have a two-story breakfast, it's comfortable and I can enjoy a beautiful landscape from the window.

✓ I have a two-story house; it's comfortable and I can enjoy a beautiful view from the window.

Several errors: 'two-story breakfast' is incorrect—likely 'two-story house'. Use a semicolon or period to separate sentences rather than a comma splice. 'Landscape' is possible but 'view' is more natural. Include articles appropriately: 'a two-story house' and 'a beautiful view'.

× Yes, I like to take photos of buildings especially when I travel.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings, especially when I travel.

Both 'like to take' and 'like taking' are grammatically possible; prefer gerund for general preference. Add a comma before 'especially' for clarity.

× So I love take photos of old church made by bricks because it always fascinate.

✓ So I love taking photos of old churches made of brick because they always fascinate me.

Repeated: ensure noun plurality 'churches' and material phrase 'made of brick'. Also adjust verb agreement and gerund usage as above.