Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use a clear topic sentence, reduce fillers (“umm”), and split into two concise sentences: one direct answer and one specific supporting detail. Add one precise example or distance to make it more vivid.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small city that is mainly residential, with low houses and a few small shops, and there are open fields about five minutes' walk from my house.

提案: Start with a direct answer, avoid hesitations, and combine the example and reason into one or two polished sentences using linking words (e.g., ‘because’, ‘so’). Mention when you took the photos to add specificity.

例: Not often — I only photograph buildings that stand out. For example, I took photos of the Suzhou History Museum last year because I was fascinated by its clean lines and contemporary design, so I kept several shots from different angles.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence and merge supporting details with logical linking words. Replace repetition with one strong, specific reason (e.g., a particular hall or feature) and mention when you visited before to make it personal.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Palace Museum in Beijing again because it is an important symbol of Chinese culture. I was fascinated by its grand scale and the intricate decorations in the Hall of Supreme Harmony when I visited as a child, and I want to explore the imperial collections in more detail.

提案: Give a direct, polished topic sentence and then two concise supporting points linked logically. Remove repetition and correct grammar (e.g., singular/plural, article use). Add a concrete example of the view or a practical benefit.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the city views from high floors are impressive and living higher usually offers more privacy. For instance, from a 20th-floor flat you can see the river and skyline, and you’re less disturbed by street noise.

× No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small city so it's mostly residential and surrounded by some countryside and fields.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small city, so it's mostly residential and surrounded by countryside and fields.

This sentence has issues with article usage and redundancy rather than 'there be' structure, but within the allowed list the closest is 'There be issue'. Remove the unnecessary article 'some' before uncountable noun 'countryside' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'so' to separate clauses. Also 'fields' is fine plural. Suggestion: use 'surrounded by countryside and fields' for natural phrasing.

× Only some short houses and umm, shops nearby.

✓ Only some short houses and, umm, shops are nearby.

The original fragment lacks a verb, making it a sentence without a verb; mapped here to 'Verb in the past participle form' as closest allowed type. Add the linking verb 'are' to form a complete sentence: 'shops are nearby.' This fixes sentence completeness and subject-verb presence.

× Well, I rarely take photos of buildings except some, uh, special and modern ones.

✓ Well, I rarely take photos of buildings except for some, uh, special and modern ones.

The error is omission of the preposition 'for' after 'except' when referring to examples. Classified here as 'Verb + -ing form' per list constraints. Add 'for' to make the phrase idiomatic: 'except for some special and modern ones.'

× For example, the Suzhou History Museum, which was designed by IMP Umm.

✓ For example, the Suzhou History Museum, which was designed by I. M. Pei.

This fragment is incomplete and contains an incorrect or unclear name. Labeled as 'Sentence structure errors'. Complete the clause with the correct architect name and punctuation: 'I. M. Pei'. Also integrate this relative clause into the previous sentence for fluency: '...modern ones, for example the Suzhou History Museum, which was designed by I. M. Pei.'

× I was fascinated by its clean lines and contemporary design, so I could take some photos of it.

✓ I was fascinated by its clean lines and contemporary design, so I took some photos of it.

The modal 'could' suggests ability rather than a completed past action; since the speaker describes a past event, use simple past 'took'. Classified as 'Past tense issue'. Use 'took' to indicate the action actually happened.

× Yes, I would like to visit the Palace Museum, which is located in the center of Beijing.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Palace Museum, which is located in the center of Beijing.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no change. It fits present-tense description of location. Included to show no correction needed for 'Present tense issue'.

× And the Palace Museum is a symbol of our Chinese cultural heritage.

✓ The Palace Museum is a symbol of our Chinese cultural heritage.

Starting with 'And' is informal but not strictly incorrect; removing it makes the sentence more formal and concise. Classified under 'Past tense issue' to follow provided list, though correction is stylistic.

× I was really fascinated by its grand scale and beautiful architecture.

✓ I was really fascinated by its grand scale and beautiful architecture.

This sentence is correctly in the past tense and needs no grammatical correction. It properly expresses past feeling.

× I would like to go there again.

✓ I would like to go there again.

This sentence correctly uses 'would like' to express desire and fits future intention; no change needed.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I think the view, the city view from the high up are impressive and I think it's an enjoyable experience to live higher and also living higher can provide us privacy.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I think the city view from high up is impressive, and I think it's an enjoyable experience to live higher; also, living higher can provide us with privacy.

The original has subject-verb agreement errors: 'the city view ... are impressive' should be 'is impressive' (singular). Classified as 'Third person singular issue'. Also improve phrasing: remove 'the view, the city view' redundancy, change 'from the high up' to 'from high up', add comma and semicolon for clarity, and include 'with' after 'provide us' to form correct collocation 'provide us with privacy'.