Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên: trả lời trực tiếp hơn, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để liên kết ý. Ví dụ sửa lỗi sử dụng “your” thay vì “my” và cấu trúc câu phủ định. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village where most houses are low and traditional, so the area feels quite rural compared with the nearby city.

提案: Cải thiện từ vựng và ngữ pháp: dùng cấu trúc tự nhiên hơn (e.g. “make me feel relaxed”, “feel more connected”) và tránh nhầm lẫn từ (‘planes’ không phù hợp nếu ý là ‘planes’ hay ‘plain’). Thêm liên từ để giải thích lý do rõ ràng hơn.

例: No, I don’t usually photograph buildings. I prefer photographing nature because the colours and light make me feel relaxed, and I feel more connected to my photos when I shoot landscapes or natural scenes.

提案: Cải thiện rõ ràng và logic: trả lời cần một chủ đề chính rõ ràng (ví dụ: muốn thăm một tòa nhà cụ thể), tránh câu rời rạc, sửa ngữ pháp (e.g. “I would like to visit a building with a mountain view”) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về lý do. Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I would love to visit a mountain lodge with large windows. I imagine living there for a while, looking out at the mountains and feeling peaceful, which would help me relax.

提案: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và logic: trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No plus lý do), sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp (e.g. “when I have enough food” và “on my SO” không rõ nghĩa). Nên nêu rõ lợi ích và một hạn chế để câu trả lời cân bằng và cụ thể hơn.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I enjoy the views from high floors and can see the whole city. However, I might miss outdoor space and fresh air, which is a downside for me.

× Buildings near your home? I live in a small village so there are not any tall buildings near my hometown.

✓ Buildings near your home? I live in a small village, so there are no tall buildings near my hometown.

The phrase 'there are not any' is grammatically awkward in this context. Native speakers typically say 'there are no' to indicate absence. Use of 'no' before the noun is more natural and concise. Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity.

× Most houses are low and traditional and the area feels quite rural compared with the nearby city.

✓ Most houses are low and traditional, and the area feels quite rural compared with the nearby city.

This sentence is generally correct in tense, but it needs a comma before the conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. The present simple 'are' and 'feels' are appropriate for general descriptions.

× I actually don't like taking photos of buildings.

✓ I actually don't like taking photos of buildings.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no modal error. Included here to confirm no change is needed.

× I prefer photographing nature because the colors and light have me relax and I feel more connect with my pictures when I shoot landscapes or planes.

✓ I prefer photographing nature because the colors and light help me relax, and I feel more connected to my pictures when I shoot landscapes or planes.

Use 'help me relax' (not 'have me relax') to express that colors and light cause relaxation. Use the adjective 'connected' (past participle used as adjective) plus the preposition 'to' after 'connected'. 'Planes' likely intended to be 'plants' or 'planes' could be incorrect; left as 'planes' since not specified. Ensure parallel structure with comma before 'and'.

× Oh yes, of course not all building is.

✓ Oh yes, of course not all buildings are like that.

Original lacks correct plural and verb agreement and is missing the predicate 'like that'. Use plural 'buildings' and plural verb 'are' and add 'like that' to complete the idea.

× There are many buildings where I could like to be this.

✓ There are many buildings where I would like to be.

'Could like to be this' is ungrammatical. Use 'would like to be' to express desire. Remove the demonstrative 'this' which is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× I would like to live in there and look out the window.

✓ I would like to live there and look out the window.

Use 'live there' (no 'in' before 'there'). 'There' already indicates location; adding 'in' is redundant and ungrammatical.

× There are the sheets, the mountains and I can feel it.

✓ There are the sheets, the mountains, and I can feel them.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree in number with plural subjects 'sheets' and 'mountains'; use 'them'. Also add comma before 'and' for clarity. Note 'sheets' may be intended as 'sights'—if so, replace with 'sights'.

× I certainly relax.

✓ I certainly feel relaxed.

Use 'feel relaxed' to describe emotional state. 'I certainly relax' suggests the action of relaxing rather than the state; 'feel relaxed' is more natural here.

× Uh, I should.

✓ Uh, I suppose so.

'I should' is incomplete here; it suggests obligation. 'I suppose so' or 'Yes, I would' fits the yes/no question about wanting to live in a tall building. Adjust to convey willingness rather than obligation.

× Honestly speaking, I love living in the tall building when I have enough food.

✓ Honestly, I like living in a tall building when I have enough space/comfort.

'Love living in the tall building' is awkward; 'a tall building' is better. 'When I have enough food' is illogical for living preference—likely meant 'space' or 'comfort'. Adjusted to 'space/comfort'. Present simple 'like' is appropriate for general preference.

× Yet yes, I like the way I look out the window and I can see all the city on my SO.

✓ Yes, I like looking out the window because I can see the whole city from my sofa.

'I like the way I look out the window' is awkward; 'I like looking out the window' is more natural. 'All the city' should be 'the whole city'. 'On my SO' is unclear—likely meant 'sofa' or 'side'; corrected to 'sofa'. Use 'from' to indicate viewpoint. Adjusted for natural English and correct preposition usage.