Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with a good example, but refine language accuracy and conciseness. Use correct word forms (e.g., "20-storey"), avoid redundancy, and keep within 3–4 sentences. Add a linking phrase to connect the example to the main idea.

例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home, mainly office towers and modern apartment blocks. For example, a 20-storey residential complex was built last year, which has changed the skyline and now includes convenient shops on the ground floor.

提案: The response is confusing and contains grammatical errors and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I don't usually take photos of buildings") and avoid contradictory phrases.

例: Not really. I don't usually take photos of buildings because I'm not very good at architectural photography. Instead, I prefer photographing people and natural scenes because they feel more expressive and interesting to me.

提案: The answer is short and contains tense and structure errors. Begin with a direct topic sentence naming the building, then give a linked reason and a brief detail. Use correct tense and smoother linking words (e.g., "I've often seen it on TV").

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Grand Palace in Thailand. I've often seen it on TV and I'm curious to see its ornate architecture and historical significance in person.

提案: The response has several vocabulary and grammar errors and some unclear phrases. Give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to present advantages and a potential downside. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "offers", "noise", "spare evenings", "fresh air", "concerns"). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I would consider living in a tall building because it offers spectacular views and more privacy away from street noise. However, I would be concerned about potential issues like elevator problems or higher maintenance costs.

× Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home, many office towers and modern apartment blocks.

✓ Yes, there are a few tall buildings near my home, including many office towers and modern apartment blocks.

This sentence originally mixed plural items correctly but sounded awkward without a linking word; 'including' improves clarity. There is no plural-singular mismatch but clarity benefits from this minor correction.

× For example, a 20 store residential complex was built last year, which has changed the skyline and offers convenient shops on the ground floor.

✓ For example, a 20-store residential complex was built last year, which has changed the skyline and offers convenient shops on the ground floor.

Hyphenate compound adjective '20-store' before the noun. This is a punctuation/style correction related to compounds rather than number agreement; it ensures correct adjective formation for a singular noun.

× No, I really take photos of buildings and not not very good at photographs and I'm not really interested in architectural photos.

✓ No, I don't really take photos of buildings and I'm not very good at photography, and I'm not really interested in architectural photos.

Multiple errors: double 'not not' and incorrect verb form. The student needed the auxiliary 'do' + negative for general present habit: 'don't take'. Also use 'photography' (noun) rather than 'photographs' after 'good at'. Clean sentence structure and remove repetition.

× I prefer taking photos of people and nature inside.

✓ I prefer taking photos of people and nature outdoors.

The preposition 'inside' contradicts photographing nature; 'outdoors' fits the intended meaning. Choose a preposition consistent with the noun to convey accurate location.

× To be this grand palace in Thailand.

✓ There is a grand palace in Thailand that I would like to visit.

Original fragment lacks a proper subject and verb and is unclear. Rewriting into a full sentence fixes sentence structure and clearly expresses the idea of wanting to visit the palace.

× I will always heard of it on the TV and I'm curious about it.

✓ I have always heard about it on TV and I'm curious about it.

Mixing 'will' with 'heard' is wrong. Use present perfect 'have heard' to indicate experience up to now. Also use 'about it' and 'on TV' (no 'the') for natural English.

× Yes, I would consider living in a tall building because it offense offers spectacular views and a sense of privacy away from street notes.

✓ Yes, I would consider living in a tall building because it often offers spectacular views and a sense of privacy away from street noise.

Word choice errors: 'offense' and 'notes' are incorrect. Replace with adverb 'often' (modal/contextual frequency) and noun 'noise'. The modal 'would' is acceptable for conditional preference.

× For example, my friends who lives on the 20th floor enjoy space tour evenings and fresh breathes.

✓ For example, my friends who live on the 20th floor enjoy spacious evenings and fresh breezes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'friends' (plural) requires 'live' not 'lives'. Also 'space tour evenings' and 'fresh breathes' are incorrect collocations; 'spacious evenings' is still odd but better, though 'enjoy spending evenings' or 'enjoy evenings with spacious views' would be clearer. 'Breezes' is the correct plural of 'breeze'.

× Although I would be mad for our potential issues like every.

✓ Although I would be concerned about potential issues, such as safety and maintenance.

Original sentence is fragmented and uses incorrect phrasing ('mad for our potential issues like every'). Rewriting provides a clear subordinate clause, a correct emotion verb 'concerned', and examples of realistic issues.