Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が通じますが、文法と語法の誤り、語彙の選択、流暢さで改善が必要です。具体的には： 1) “not much of skyscrapers”は不自然なので“not many skyscrapers”に直す。2) “in the countryside”の代わりに“a rural area”や“the countryside”で一貫させる。3) 2文目は結びつきは良いが、リンク語（for example / so / therefore）で論理をもっと明確にする。4) 文の数は3文以内に収め、簡潔に述べる。

例: No, there aren’t many skyscrapers because I grew up in a rural area. However, I enjoy visiting the city to see tall buildings, so I often go to the urban area on weekends.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法や語順、語彙選択を改善するとより自然になります。具体的には： 1) “take a pictures”は誤りで“take pictures”にする。2) “It makes me relaxed”は“it makes me feel relaxed”へ。3) “in attractive memories”は不自然なので“creates lasting memories”など具体的で自然な表現に変える。4) つなぎ言葉（because / so / therefore）を適切に使う。

例: No, I don’t. I prefer taking pictures of natural scenery, such as mountains and rivers, because they make me feel relaxed and create lasting memories.

提案: 答えは具体的で良いですが、発音に関する語句や表現を自然に整理するとさらに良くなります。改善点： 1) 固有名詞は正確に（“Tokyo Skytree”が正しい）。2) “I do like to go to”は冗長なので“I would like to visit”など簡潔に。3) 補足理由をもう一つ付け加えると説得力が増す（景色や展望台のことなど）。

例: I would like to visit the Tokyo Skytree because I’ve never been there and it offers panoramic views of the city from its observation decks.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、文法、語順、安全性に関する語彙表現を正確にすると良いです。具体的には： 1) “it is not safety”は“it is not safe”に訂正。2) 例の文は時制と語順が不自然なので“if a fire broke out, it would be difficult to escape”のように言う。3) 代替案（例えば低層住宅のどの点が良いか）を短く付け加えると説得力が増す。

例: I don’t think so. I feel living in a tall building isn’t very safe — if a fire broke out, it would be difficult to escape quickly. I prefer a low-rise house where evacuation would be easier.

× No, there are not much of skyscrapers because my hometown is in the countryside.

✓ No, there are not many skyscrapers because my hometown is in the countryside.

'Skyscrapers' is countable plural, so use 'many' (not 'much') with plural nouns. Also 'there are not' is natural but contracted 'there aren't many skyscrapers' is also acceptable. Replace 'much of skyscrapers' with 'many skyscrapers'.

× However, I like to see tall buildings, so I like to go to urban area.

✓ However, I like to see tall buildings, so I like to go to urban areas.

Use the plural 'urban areas' when speaking generally. Alternatively, use 'the urban area' or 'the city' with the definite article. 'Go to urban area' is incorrect because 'area' needs an article or plural form.

× No I don't because I prefer to take a pictures of natural areas like mountains and rivers.

✓ No, I don't because I prefer to take pictures of natural areas like mountains and rivers.

'Pictures' is plural so do not use the indefinite article 'a'. Remove 'a' before 'pictures'. Also add a comma after 'No' for natural speech.

× It makes me relaxed and it can be uh, in attractive memories.

✓ It makes me relaxed and it can become an attractive memory.

Use 'become' instead of 'be' plus noun to express results. 'Attractive' modifies 'memory' (singular) and 'in attractive memories' is ungrammatical. Use 'an attractive memory' or 'attractive memories'. Also 'relaxed' is fine as adjective; 'it makes me feel relaxed' is more natural.

× Let me see, I do like to go to Tokyo Sky 3IN Tokyo because I've never gone there before and it is one of the famous buildings in Japan.

✓ Let me see, I would like to go to Tokyo Skytree in Tokyo because I've never been there before and it is one of the famous buildings in Japan.

Use 'would like to' for expressing desire. The attraction name is 'Tokyo Skytree'. Use present perfect 'I've never been there before' rather than 'gone' for visiting places. 'Gone' implies the person is still there; 'been' indicates visiting.

× I don't think so since it is not safety.

✓ I don't think so since it is not safe.

Use the adjective 'safe' (not the noun 'safety') to describe a place or thing. 'Not safe' correctly modifies 'it'.

× For example, when the buildings fired it was con challenging to escape from there.

✓ For example, when a building catches fire, it can be challenging to escape from there.

Correct structure: 'when a building catches fire' (present simple to describe general situation). 'Fired' is incorrect verb form. Use 'catches fire' or 'is on fire'. 'Con' is likely 'can'; correct to 'can'. Use singular 'a building' or plural 'buildings' consistently and remove awkward 'from there' (you can keep 'escape' without 'from there').