Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer a clear complete sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Start with a topic sentence, then give a reason or description using linking words (e.g., "because", "and"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, there is a tall building near my home. It was recently renovated, so the exterior is bright white and has many large windows, which makes it stand out in the neighborhood.

提案: Answer directly with a topic sentence, then give a concise reason and one specific example. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" and avoid filler words like "uh." Keep it to 2 sentences.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I like their architecture and colors. For example, I recently photographed the renovated white building near my home because its rows of windows look very attractive.

提案: Give a clear answer naming a specific building you want to visit or a type of building, then explain why with one or two concrete reasons. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") and avoid hesitations. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the city art museum because it has famous modern architecture and many interesting exhibitions. I want to see both the building's design and the artwork inside.

提案: Provide a direct yes/no answer with a short explanation and at least one specific reason. Use complete sentences and avoid unclear fragments. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer great views and modern facilities. However, I might miss having a garden, so I would prefer a high-floor apartment with a balcony.

× My home nearest tall building.

✓ My home is near a tall building.

The original sentence lacks a verb and uses incorrect word order. Use the verb 'is' to form a complete clause and the adjective phrase 'near a tall building' to express proximity. Suggestion: include a form of 'to be' and correct word order (Subject + verb + complement).

× It's a new renovation building.

✓ It's a newly renovated building.

The phrase 'new renovation building' incorrectly combines noun and adjective forms. Use the adverb 'newly' + past participle 'renovated' to describe a building that has been renovated. Suggestion: use 'newly renovated' for correct adjective phrase.

× It's a white color and so many windows in the building and building color is white.

✓ It is white and has many windows.

Redundant phrasing ('white color' and repeating 'building color is white') and incorrect sentence construction. Use the adjective 'white' for color and a verb phrase 'has many windows' to describe features. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

× Ya definitely I'll take photos in the building because building is a newly renovated and uh building color is a very good.

✓ Yes, I will definitely take photos of the building because it is newly renovated and its color looks very nice.

Multiple problems: informal 'Ya' to 'Yes'; missing third person singular verb 'is' for 'building'; incorrect noun phrase 'newly renovated' needed; 'building color is a very good' mixes adjective use. Use 'it is' and possessive 'its color' and adjective 'nice'. Also use 'of the building' not 'in the building' when taking photos of the exterior.

× So I like the building and I take the picture.

✓ So I like the building and I took pictures of it.

Tense should match context: if referring to a habitual or past action, use present simple ('I take pictures') for habitual or past simple ('I took pictures') for a specific past event. Here to describe a past action or completed action, 'took pictures' is appropriate. Also use plural 'pictures' and include object pronoun 'it'.

× Of course, I like to visit building because the building is uh, uh, stay in the new people and, uh.

✓ Of course, I would like to visit the building because new people live there.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'would like to visit the building' for polite intention. 'Stay in the new people' is incorrect; use 'new people live there' or 'it has new residents'. Ensure correct subject-verb order and include the definite article 'the' before 'building' when referring to a specific building.

× But one day this past.

✓ But maybe one day in the future.

The original fragment 'But one day this past' is ungrammatical and unclear. Depending on intended meaning (speaking about future desire to live in a tall building), use 'maybe one day in the future' or 'but maybe someday'. Ensure the sentence has a clear subject and verb if needed and matches the tense/context.