Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁、有条理，并注意语法和句子连接。避免重复词（如“yes, yes”或“make it make me it”），并用连接词使信息更连贯。可以先给出总观点，再补充一两条具体细节，比如确切类型和周末的情况。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home — about a dozen. My flat is in a commercial district, so there are several high-rise office towers and large shopping malls. At weekends the area becomes quite busy, which makes it very convenient for dining and shopping.

提案: 回答要减少填充词（umm, uh）和语法错误，保持句子自然流畅。首先直接回答，然后用一两句具体细节说明为什么喜欢拍摄，举例说明拍摄对象或风格。使用连词如“because”或“for example”。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I live in a commercial area with diverse architecture. For example, I often photograph shopping malls and office blocks to capture their shapes and architectural details.

提案: 答案应更具体并修正语法，如时态和代词使用。先给出简短肯定句，再具体说明想去的原因和举例（哪类餐厅或商店）。避免重复词（"in in"）并用连接词使句子更顺畅。

例: Yes, I would like to visit a particular shopping mall nearby because it has many good restaurants and a wide range of clothing and gift stores. I especially enjoy trying different cuisines there and browsing boutique shops for presents.

提案: 回答要更清晰并纠正重复和语法错误。先直接回答，再给出一两个明确原因（如等电梯、紧急情况、邻里感）。说明自己目前住的楼层或建筑类型时用简洁表达。

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a very tall building because waiting for elevators can be time-consuming. I currently live in a seven-storey building, which I find more convenient and community-oriented.

× Yes, yes, there are 12 buildings near my home.

✓ Yes, there are 12 buildings near my home.

句子本身沒有數量與名詞不一致問題，但口語中重複“yes, yes”不需要。保留“are 12 buildings”為複數形式正確。建議刪去多餘重複以更自然。

× Because my home is situated in a commercial district, there are high rise and shopping malls and in the weekends it's very busy and it's make it make me it very convenient for me to go out and eat.

✓ Because my home is situated in a commercial district, there are high-rise buildings and shopping malls, and on weekends it's very busy, which makes it very convenient for me to go out and eat.

句子結構混亂，有重複字詞和不正確的短語連接。需要把“high rise”改為“high-rise buildings”（名詞短語），將“in the weekends”改為正確介詞短語“on weekends”，把“it's make it make me it very convenient”改為“which makes it very convenient”。簡潔連貫可讀。

× Yes, I like take taking photos of buildings, umm, because my home is created in uh, commercial areas.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings because my home is located in a commercial area.

動詞喜好結構“like”後應接動名詞或動詞不定式，常用doing形式，因此用“taking”。“created in commercial areas”語義不當，應用“located in a commercial area”。此外把複數/單數和冠詞調整為更自然表達。

× There are many kinds of, uh, different buildings like such as uh, shopping malls, office buildings.

✓ There are many different kinds of buildings, such as shopping malls and office buildings.

“many kinds of different”冗餘（kinds of和different不能同時用），且“like such as”重複。使用“many different kinds of”或“many kinds of”並接“such as”即可。調整詞序使語意清晰。

× I like to capture their shapes and details.

✓ I like to capture their shapes and details.

句子語法正確，時態和動詞形式適合用於描述習慣性行為，無需修改。建議保持現在時。

× Yes, there is a shopping mall that I would like to visit often because there are many restaurants serving with delicious food and I would like to buy clothes and gifts in in there.

✓ Yes, there is a shopping mall that I often visit because there are many restaurants serving delicious food, and I would like to buy clothes and gifts there.

“serving with delicious food”中“with”多餘，應為“serving delicious food”。“in in there”重複且冗餘，應用“there”。“would like to visit often”語序不自然，改為“I often visit”或“that I would like to visit”均可，根據語境選擇。此處保留一般現在時或習慣性表達。

× It make me feel comfortable.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable.

主謂不一致錯誤。主語“It”是第三人稱單數，動詞需加-s，故“make”應改為“makes”。

× Honestly, I don't like to live in a tall building because in it's it take many times to to wait the elevator.

✓ Honestly, I don't like living in a tall building because it takes a long time to wait for the elevator.

“don't like to live in”可改為“don't like living in”更自然。語句中“in it's it”為冗餘錯誤需刪除。“take many times to to wait the elevator”語法錯誤且冗長，應為“it takes a long time to wait for the elevator”。此外“wait the elevator”缺少介詞“for”。去除重複“to”。

× My home is is a 7 seven rise rise rise rise. Building it. I feel it's very convenient.

✓ My home is a seven-storey building. I feel it's very convenient.

原句有大量重複詞（is is、7 seven、rise…）且斷句不當。用“seven-storey building”或“a seven-story building”（美式）表達樓層高度更準確。清楚斷句後語義明確。