Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中要更直接并减少语音填充词（如 uh），句子要更简洁并注意语法和逻辑（例如“within 5 or 10 minutes work”不通顺）。可以给出一到两个具体细节并用连接词使句子更连贯。练习时注意时间表达和动词用法。

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home, mainly residential towers and apartment blocks. For example, I can see very tall apartment buildings from my window, and they are about a five- to ten-minute walk away.

提案: 答案要自然并直接回应问题，避免奇怪的开头词（如 'Ideal'）。注意名词单复数和形容词搭配（'photos of buildings'，'subtle details'），并用连词连接原因与举例。地名和建筑细节要拼写及表达准确。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because it lets me capture interesting angles and subtle details. For example, when I visited Wenchu Temple, I took many photos of its red walls and green tiled roofs.

提案: 回答需更流畅且语法正确。去掉多余的停顿词，改正名词和动词形式（'keeps a lot of artifacts'），并用连接词说明原因和感受。最后一句要表达清楚，例如说 'I enjoy visiting it'。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Art Museum, which is only a five- to ten-minute walk from my home. It houses many artifacts and modern installations, such as paintings and portraits, so I always enjoy exploring its exhibitions.

提案: 需纠正词汇和表达错误（'The mirror is that'、'higher PLA location' 无意义），减少停顿并用清晰的原因和例子说明偏好。注意短句和连接词，使回答在五句内完整且自然。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because higher floors offer a wide view and a quieter atmosphere. For example, in the future I hope to buy a flat on an upper floor so I can enjoy the view and more peace.

× Yes, they are actually.

✓ Yes, there are.

原句使用了主系表结构“they are”不合上下文。回答前面问题“Are there tall buildings near your home?”应该用存在句式“There are ...”来表示存在，故改为“Yes, there are.” 简单回答时使用“There are”更自然。

× There are several tall buildings near my home, such as some residential towers and apartment buildings.

✓ There are several tall buildings near my home, such as residential towers and apartment buildings.

原句中“such as some residential towers”中“some”与“such as”重复且冗余。使用“such as + 名词短语”即可列举例子，去掉“some”。

× For instance, I can say uh, very tall apartment buildings when I look out uh, my window, which within uh 5 or 10 minutes work.

✓ For instance, I can see very tall apartment buildings when I look out my window, which are within a 5- to 10-minute walk.

原句结构混乱：1) “I can say ... when I look out my window”语义不通，应为“I can see ...”。2) 定语从句“which within 5 or 10 minutes work”缺少动词和正确的词序，应该是“which are within a 5- to 10-minute walk”。同时时间表达用“5- to 10-minute”作复合形容词，词序与搭配需改正。

× Ideal.

✓ Yes.

学生回答“Do you take photos of buildings?”时单词“Ideal.”不合语境，应以肯定回答“Yes”或“No”。“Ideal”是形容词，不能单独作为对此问题的恰当回答。

× I'm really quite into taking photos of building because I can capture different angles and sound subtle details.

✓ I'm really quite into taking photos of buildings because I can capture different angles and subtle details.

原句有两处错误：1) “photos of building”名词单复数错误，需用复数“buildings”。2) “sound subtle details”中“sound”错误地插入，应删除，保留“subtle details”。

× For instance, when I have a traveling in Wenchu Temple, I take a lot of photo of the red walls and the green tailed roof.

✓ For instance, when I was traveling to Wenchu Temple, I took a lot of photos of the red walls and the green-tiled roof.

问题有：1) 时态与动词搭配不当，应用过去进行或过去时“was traveling”或“traveled to”。2) “a traveling”不正确，traveling为动名词或现在分词，不加不定冠词。3) “a lot of photo”需用复数“photos”。4) “green tailed roof”词不达意，应为“green-tiled roof”（绿色瓦片屋顶）。整体改为过去时以匹配“when I was traveling”。

× Yes, I really like to visit the Art Museum, which is just uh, 5 to 10 minutes walk away from my house.

✓ Yes, I would really like to visit the Art Museum, which is just a 5- to 10-minute walk from my house.

原句时态与语气不匹配：回答“Is there a building that you would like to visit?”应使用条件/愿望表达“would like to visit”。同时“5 to 10 minutes walk”缺少冠词和连字符，正确为“a 5- to 10-minute walk”。介词用“from my house”。

× Uh, the main reason that, uh, the museum keep a lot artifacts and uh, some modern installation such as paintings and uh, portraits.

✓ The main reason is that the museum keeps a lot of artifacts and some modern installations such as paintings and portraits.

错误包括：1) 句子缺少谓语，应为“The main reason is that...” 2) “museum keep”主谓不一致，应为“museum keeps”。3) “a lot artifacts”缺少介词“of”，应为“a lot of artifacts”。4) “installation”应复数“installations”或用“installations such as...”。修正了主从句结构与数的一致性。

× Whenever I meet, uh, the Art Museum I can enjoy.

✓ Whenever I visit the Art Museum, I enjoy it.

原句“Whenever I meet, the Art Museum”用词错误，“meet”不应与建筑物搭配，应使用“visit”。句子缺少宾语“it”。同时“can enjoy”改为一般现在时“enjoy”更自然，或保留“can enjoy it”。

× The mirror is that I really like live in a higher PLA location and so I can look, uh, have a wide view of my tower and enjoy a peaceful atmosphere.

✓ The reason is that I really like to live in a higher place so I can have a wide view and enjoy a peaceful atmosphere.

原句问题：1) “The mirror is that”应为“The reason is that”。2) “like live”缺少不定式“to”: “like to live”。3) “higher PLA location”中“PLA”显然是错误词，意应为“place”。4) “look, uh, have a wide view of my tower”语序和搭配错误，应为“have a wide view”或“be able to look out over the city/town”。整体改为自然表达并修正词汇和动词形式。

× For instance, in the future I'd like to buy a flat in a high building.

✓ For instance, in the future I'd like to buy a flat in a tall building.

“a high building”搭配不自然，常用形容词“tall”来描述建筑物高度，故改为“a tall building”。时态与语气（I'd like）正确，无需改动。