Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并结构清晰。先给出简短明确的主题句，比如“是的，我家附近有很多高楼”，然后用一两句具体原因或细节支持（例如居民多、土地有限），避免重复与语法错误，句子不要过长。注意冠词和单复数形式（a modernized city, many tall buildings）。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. Hong Kong is a densely populated city with limited land, so the government and developers build upward to accommodate residents.

提案: 回答需要逻辑更连贯并使用正确语法。先直接回答（No），然后用一到两句具体原因支持（不擅长拍照、别人评价），用连接词如“because”或“so”连接句子，避免模糊词汇和错误表达（e.g., “a few things”用法不当，‘totally a ugly’应为 ‘totally ugly’）。

例: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings because I’m not good at photography. If I try, my friends or family often say the pictures look awkward, so I prefer not to take many photos.

提案: 回答应避免使用句子片段并使结构自然。直接回复（No），然后给出简明理由并可提供一例替代活动（学习占用时间）。避免同时使用‘although’和‘but’造成冗余。可补充一点具体信息以显得更具体（例如哪类建筑不感兴趣或学习什么科目）。

例: No, I don’t have a particular building I want to visit. Although many famous buildings exist, I’m a student and spend most of my time studying for exams, so I’m not very interested in sightseeing right now.

提案: 回答应更自然并给出具体细节。先简短回答（Yes），然后说明原因并举例（better views, quieter, facilities), 用连词如 ‘because’ 或 ‘so’ 连接。注意用词搭配（see different views → enjoy views / have a good view）。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views of the city. For example, I could enjoy sunrises from a high floor and the apartment might be quieter than a street-level flat.

× Yes, this is because that Hong Kong is a modernized city, you know, since we have to accommodate numerous residents.

✓ Yes, this is because Hong Kong is a modernized city, you know, since we have to accommodate numerous residents.

句中多余的指示代词“that”不应该出现在“because”后，正确表达应直接使用主语“Hong Kong”。建议去掉“that”。（简体中文）

× So our government was keen to build some building that is very tall.

✓ So our government was keen to build some buildings that are very tall.

原句中“some building”与复数指代不一致且谓语过去式“was keen”可保留但更自然用一般过去表示过去的倾向；主语“some”后应接复数名词“buildings”。同时从句中动词与复数主语保持一致，用“are”。建议将“some building”改为“some buildings”。（简体中文）

× No, I really take photo a few things.

✓ No, I really take photos of a few things.

“take photo”搭配不正确，应该使用复数“photos”并用介词短语“of a few things”表示拍摄对象。建议改为“take photos of a few things”。（简体中文）

× Since I'm not a person who is good at photographing.

✓ Since I'm not a person who is good at photography.

“good at”后应接名词或动名词短语，通常说“good at photography”或“good at taking photos”。“photographing”虽可用但更常见和自然的是“photography”或“taking photos”。建议改为“good at photography”或“good at taking photos”。（简体中文）

× When I am going to take a photo, it is supposed that my parents or my friends will say that this is totally a ugly work.

✓ When I am going to take a photo, my parents or my friends usually say that it is a totally ugly photo.

原句结构混乱：“it is supposed that”在这里不自然且被动结构用法不当；“a ugly”冠词与形容词搭配错误，应为“an ugly”；“work”用词不当，应为“photo”。将句子改为主动结构并修正冠词与名词更自然。建议使用“usually say that it is a totally ugly photo”。（简体中文）

× No, although there are many famous buildings throughout the world. But since I am a student I spend most of my time on studying and I'm not interested in buildings.

✓ No. Although there are many famous buildings throughout the world, since I am a student I spend most of my time studying and I'm not interested in buildings.

原文中使用连词“Although”引导的从句不应与前句直接分开并随后再用“But”，造成连接词重复和断句问题。应将“Although”从句与主句连成一个句子，且“spend time studying”中不要加介词“on”。建议删去“But”，把“on studying”改为“studying”。（简体中文）

× Yes I will since if you live in a tall building you can see different views from your home or places.

✓ Yes, I would. If you live in a tall building, you can see different views from your home.

原句时态和语气混乱：“Yes I will since if you live...”结构不正确。对假设性回答更自然用“Yes, I would”或“Yes, I would like to”，并把条件句单独表达。另外“from your home or places”表达冗余，应简化为“from your home”。建议使用“Yes, I would. If you live in a tall building, you can see different views from your home.”（简体中文）