Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答应该更直接并且更简洁，先用一句主题句回答问题（有或没有高楼），然后用一两句具体细节支持。避免冗长或不相关的信息，使用连词如“however”或“also”使句子更连贯。注意时态和词汇搭配（e.g. “far from the city centre”，不是“far away from the city center”重复结构）。

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village far from the city centre, so the skyline is mostly low houses and trees. However, the village has nice natural features like a river and a forest, which I enjoy visiting.

提案: 回答不够清晰且有许多语法/词汇错误（例如“photos of a few games”、“second college building”）。先直接回答是否常拍摄建筑，然后给出一个具体例子并说明原因。使用准确词汇（e.g. “I don’t usually take photos of buildings”）。

例: I don't usually take photos of buildings. However, last summer I visited Kuala Lumpur and saw an impressive historic building, so I took a photo because its architecture was unique and memorable.

提案: 回答要明确指出具体建筑并用正确词汇（例如“the Eiffel Tower”而不是“the power installed in Paris”）。先一句清楚表达想去的建筑，再说明原因并可加入细节或个人感受，用连接词如“because”或“because of”。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because I have heard from friends that it is very tall and offers spectacular city views. Also, I’d like to experience the atmosphere there and take pictures from the top.

提案: 回答应更直接并更有逻辑：先回答想不想住高楼（Yes/No），然后给出1–2个具体理由。注意句子结构和词序（例如“I don't feel very safe”）。可以用比较句或举例说明偏好。

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I don't feel very safe in high-rise blocks, and I prefer a detached house in a quieter area away from the city where there is more space and fresh air.

× And to be honest, I live in the village and far away from the city center so I can't see any tall buildings around my village. But we also have the natural places in my village including the river and forest and so on.

✓ To be honest, I live in a village far away from the city center, so I can't see any tall buildings near my home. But we also have natural places in my village, such as a river and a forest.

句子结构混乱并包含冗余连接词：“And to be honest” 与 “But” 连用使语流不顺。将定冠词和地点表达规范化（a village, near my home），并把列举用法改为 such as，使表达更自然、连贯。建议把句子分为两句，保持主旨清晰。

× Normally I dislike taking photos of a few games, but last summer vacation I went to the capital of Malaysia and it has the second college building in the world, so I also took the photo.

✓ Normally I don't like taking photos of buildings, but last summer I went to the capital of Malaysia and saw the second tallest college building in the world, so I took a photo.

原句中“a few games” 用得不合适，应使用“buildings”；“last summer vacation” 可简化为 “last summer”。“second college building” 语义不明确，应为“second tallest college building” 或者其他正确描述。量词和名词搭配错误，需用合适的定语修饰名词。中文建议：注意名词搭配与数量词的使用，用正确的形容词（如 tallest / tallest）来表达顺序。

× Yes, I would like to visit the power installed in Paris. I heard it from my friends and she described it very tall and attracted many tourists to visit it every year, so I also would like.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris. I heard about it from my friend; she described it as very tall and said it attracts many tourists every year, so I would like to visit it too.

原句中“the power installed in Paris” 词不达意，应为特定建筑名（Eiffel Tower）。“I heard it from my friends and she described it” 中人称和代词不一致（friends 与 she）；应统一为单数 friend 或复数 friends，并用正确的介词短语“heard about”。此外，“described it very tall” 应改为“described it as very tall”；“attracted” 时态应与句意一致，改为一般现在时“attracts”。中文建议：注意代词指代一致、动词短语固定搭配（hear about, describe as），并使用正确时态。

× To be honest, I don't like living in our building and in response of all I think it's I am not very safe. As for us, I prefer to be in the house and far away from the city.

✓ To be honest, I don't like living in tall buildings because I don't feel very safe in them. I prefer to live in a house far away from the city.

原句多处词序与搭配错误：“living in our building” 含义不明确，应该说明“tall buildings”；“in response of all I think it's I am not very safe” 完全不符合英语表达，应简化为 because 从句或用 I don't feel very safe。最后一句重复主语，建议合并为一条清晰陈述。中文建议：避免直译，使用自然的因果连接（because），以及正确表达感受（feel safe / not feel safe）。