Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答內容具體且資訊充足，但開頭有口誤（“Is there a”），語句連接略顯生硬。建議：1) 避免口誤，開頭直接回答問題（如“I live near a tall building.”）；2) 縮減重複（例如“stands really high”與“roughly 50 floors”意義重疊）；3) 使用連接詞使語流更自然（例如“for example”, “and”）。

例: Yes. There is a very tall building right in front of my apartment; it has about fifty floors, so it dominates the skyline. For example, some levels are occupied by a hotel while others are used as office space.

提案: 回答清楚且有內容，表達自然但可更簡潔並加入一兩個具體例子以增強說服力。建議：1) 用更自然的連接詞（如“especially”後接名詞短語時調整語序）；2) 加入具體建築或拍照目的（例如保存回憶、分享給朋友）。

例: Yes, I do. When I travel I often photograph buildings that are unique or historically important; for example, I took many photos of old temples to remember their intricate decorations and to share them with friends.

提案: 句子結構有誤（“I have known wanted to visit”不通順），且信息略顯重複。建議：1) 使用正確且簡潔的主題句（例如“I’d like to visit the Canton Tower.”）；2) 加入一兩個具體原因或期待的活動（如觀景、拍照）；3) 使用連接詞讓描述更流暢。

例: I’d like to visit the Canton Tower in Guangdong province. It’s a famous landmark with a unique design, and I want to go up to the observation deck to enjoy the city view and take photos.

提案: 回答直接且理由清晰，但可以更自然地使用連接詞和添加具體細節來支持觀點。建議：1) 在每個理由後提供具體例子或情境（例如曾經等電梯多長時間）；2) 使用詞語替換以避免重複（如用“security concerns”或“fire safety”替代“不安全”）。

例: No, I wouldn’t. For one thing, waiting for lifts during rush hour can be very time-consuming—I've once waited almost twenty minutes. For another, I have security concerns and worry about evacuation in case of an emergency.

× Is there a There is actually a tall building right in front of my apartment.

✓ There is actually a tall building right in front of my apartment.

原句出现了句子重复和结构混乱（“Is there a There is”），造成句子无谓重复且不成句。应删除多余的“Is there a”。建议在说话时先理清要表达的句子，避免在同一句里尝试两种结构。

× Some floors are used for hotel and some are used for offices.

✓ Some floors are used for hotels and some are used for offices.

在此处“hotel”和“office”表示用途，应使用复数形式或名词复数以配合复数主语“Some floors”。将“hotel”改为“hotels”。建议检查表示种类或用途的名词是否需复数。

× Yes, there is one building that I have known wanted to visit is the Canton Tower located in Guangdong province.

✓ Yes, one building that I have long wanted to visit is the Canton Tower located in Guangdong province.

原句中“have known wanted”结构不正确，应该使用现在完成时的“have wanted”并加副词“long”或“一直”表达持续愿望。这里涉及动词短语顺序和过去分词使用错误。建议将“have known wanted”替换为“have long wanted”或“have always wanted”。

× When I travel, if I happen to come across buildings that are unique and attractive, especially those buildings of a long history, I often snap a photo to capture them.

✓ When I travel, if I happen to come across buildings that are unique and attractive, especially those with a long history, I often snap a photo to capture them.

短语“those buildings of a long history”在英语中不自然，常用表达是“those with a long history”或“those that have a long history”。建议使用介词短语“with a long history”。

× The Canton Tower is the landmark building in Guangzhou, which is tall, unique and attractive.

✓ The Canton Tower is a landmark in Guangzhou; it is tall, unique and attractive.

原句使用关系代词“which”后接形容词短语，逻辑上可能被误解为修饰“Guangzhou”。改为分号或分句更清晰：先断言塔是地标，再描述其特点。建议避免用“which”连接会产生歧义的补充说明，改用独立句或限定性从句并明确修饰对象。

× First, it often takes a lot of time during the rush hours to wait the elevator.

✓ First, it often takes a lot of time during rush hour to wait for the elevator.

短语应为“wait for the elevator”，动词后需加介词“for”；“during the rush hours”也不自然，常用“during rush hour”或“during the rush hours”任选但更常见单数短语。这里涉及动词 + 介词固定搭配问题和介词用法。建议记住动词“wait”常与“for”连用以表示等待某物或某人。