Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak more clearly and concisely. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific details. Correct basic grammar (e.g., articles, word order) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” only once and smoothly.

例: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home because I live in an apartment in a large Chinese city. For example, there is a 30‑storey residential block and several office towers within a five‑minute walk.

提案: Give a direct answer, then explain briefly with a clear reason and a specific example. Fix tense and article errors (e.g., “the first time I arrive” → “when I first arrive”). Keep it to two or three sentences and use a linking word like “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I do. I often photograph buildings when I first arrive in a new place because I want to remember the architecture. For example, I took several photos when I visited the city museum last year.

提案: Answer directly and give a reason and one specific detail. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use a topic sentence like “Yes, I would like to visit...” then add why (e.g., its design, collection, history) with a linking word such as “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I would like to visit the National Library because it has a historic reading room and a large collection of rare books. For example, I heard they have original maps and manuscripts from my region.

提案: Be clear about your main reason and use correct vocabulary (elevator, upstairs). Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one specific reason with a linking word like “because” or “so.” Avoid repetition and short fragments.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it usually has an elevator, which is convenient for daily life. For instance, I prefer not to climb many flights of stairs when I carry groceries.

× Yes, there are tall buildings near my house near my home because I live. I live in apartment in my China there are many tall building especially in the city.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my home because I live in an apartment in China. There are many tall buildings, especially in the city.

Multiple sentence structure issues: repetition ('near my house near my home'), sentence fragments ('because I live.'), missing articles ('an apartment', 'China' without 'in' placement), and plural agreement ('tall building' -> 'tall buildings'). Suggestion: combine related ideas into clear sentences, remove repetition, use articles 'an' before singular countable nouns, and ensure plural nouns match context. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I live in apartment in my China there are many tall building especially in the city.

✓ I live in an apartment in China; there are many tall buildings, especially in the city.

Missing article 'an' before 'apartment' and incorrect use of 'my' before 'China'. Also 'tall building' should be plural 'tall buildings'. Suggestion: use 'an' for singular nouns beginning with a vowel sound, omit possessive before country names, and use plural when referring to more than one. (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× Yes I do. I like to take photos of buildings especially when I first time to to arrive the a place.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to take photos of buildings, especially when I first arrive at a place.

Incorrect phrasing 'first time to to arrive the a place' — unnecessary 'to', wrong article, and wrong preposition. Use simple present 'I first arrive' for habitual actions and 'arrive at' a place. Also include commas for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID: 8)

× For example when I first time to go to the museum I like to take photos.

✓ For example, when I first go to a museum I like to take photos.

Awkward phrasing 'first time to go to the museum' should be 'first go to a museum' or 'the first time I go to a museum'. Use 'a museum' for general reference and correct word order. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× Yes, there is a building that you that my, I, I, I would like to visit. It is a. It is a library. The library is very popular. So I wanted to.

✓ Yes, there is a building that I would like to visit. It is a library. The library is very popular, so I want to visit it.

Contains repetition and sentence fragments ('that you that my, I, I, I', 'It is a.'). Mixed tenses: 'So I wanted to' is incomplete and past tense; use present 'I want to visit it' to express desire. Combine ideas into complete sentences. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× It is a library. The library is very popular.

✓ It is a library. The library is very popular.

This sentence is actually correct in article use; no change needed. Keep as is but ensure previous fragment issues are fixed. (If marking, this is fine.) (Grammar problem type ID: 22)

× Yes, I want to live in a tall building because I think there there is a elector in the tall building.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because I think there is an elevator in tall buildings.

Multiple errors: repetition 'there there', incorrect noun 'elector' instead of 'elevator', article misuse 'a elevator' should be 'an elevator', and inconsistency singular/plural. Use 'in tall buildings' or 'in the tall building' depending on meaning. Fix spelling and articles. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× I I feel I take the electric it's better than work the upstairs.

✓ I feel taking the elevator is better than walking up the stairs.

Awkward and incorrect phrases: 'take the electric' should be 'take the elevator'; 'work the upstairs' should be 'walking up the stairs'. Use gerund 'taking' for the activity as a noun, and correct noun 'stairs'. Ensure pronoun repetition removed and verbs used appropriately. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)