Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えはおおむね理解できるが、語彙の誤用（topics→tall buildings?）、文法ミス、冗長な表現がある。まず冒頭で直接に「No, there aren’t tall buildings near my home.」のような明確な主題文を言い、その後に場所と理由を一文で簡潔に述べる練習をすること。例えば『near my home』と『at the next station』の対比を扱う際は、接続語（however, but, instead）を使って文のつながりを明確にする。発音や語順も整えて、一文あたり3〜4つの短い句で説明することを意識するとより自然に聞こえる。

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Instead, if I go to the next station, I can see some tall apartment blocks and department stores because that area is more commercial.

提案: 内容は伝わるが語順と語彙の選択に改善が必要（boarding→building?；take photo→take photos）。曖昧な発語（uh）が多く、繰り返しを減らすべき。まず簡潔な主語文を言い、その後に条件（if節）や理由を一つか二つ挙げ、接続詞（because, when, if）でつなぐ練習をする。具体例（例えば美しいファサードや歴史的建造物）を1つ入れると説得力が増す。

例: Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings when they have an interesting façade or are in a beautiful setting. For example, I often photograph historic buildings because their details and colours are unique.

提案: 意図は明確だが、文法（if I have a change→if I have a chance）、語の反復（skyscrapers, skyscraper buildings）と冗長さを改善する。最初に明確な肯定文を述べ、次に訪れたい建物とその理由を一文で説明するとよい。場所の固有名詞は正確に言い、テレビで見るイメージについて述べる際は'like on TV'や'in films'などの自然な表現を使う。

例: Yes, I would love to visit Namsan Tower in South Korea. I’d also like to go to the United States to see the famous skyscrapers I’ve often seen on TV because they look impressive in person.

提案: 考えは伝わるが文法と語順に多数の誤り（living a great tall building→living in a very tall building；I'm more grounded person→I'm a more down-to-earth person）。理由を一つか二つに絞り、接続語（because, so）で明確に繋げること。『private area』は漠然としているので、'a house with a garden'や'a quiet neighbourhood'など具体的な語に置き換える練習をする。

例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a very tall building. I’m a down-to-earth person and I prefer living in a quiet house with a small garden because it feels more private and peaceful.

× No, there are no topics in my home, but if I go to the next station we can see some tall apartment or department store because it's more commercial place.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near my home, but if I go to the next station we can see some tall apartment buildings or department stores because it's a more commercial area.

The student used 'topics' which is the wrong noun; the correct noun is 'buildings'. 'Apartment' and 'department store' need plural forms when speaking generally ('apartment buildings', 'department stores'). 'More commercial place' should be 'a more commercial area'. Also 'near my home' fits the question better. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('building') and match singular/plural to the context; use articles ('a') and the word 'area' for locations.

× Yes, sometimes if the building has, uh, beautiful aesthetics or landscape, I will take photo, but it's if it's just usual boarding or ordinary building, I don't take it photo, uh, whether it has memorable spot.

✓ Yes, sometimes if a building has beautiful aesthetics or an attractive setting, I will take photos, but if it's just an ordinary building, I don't take photos even if it has a memorable spot.

Use 'a building' (indefinite article) and 'aesthetic' works as an adjective or 'beautiful aesthetics' is awkward; 'attractive setting' is clearer. 'Take photo' must be plural 'take photos' for general habits. 'Usual boarding' is incorrect — likely meant 'ordinary building'. 'Whether' is misused; use 'even if'. Suggestion: use appropriate articles ('a'), pluralize countable nouns for habitual actions ('photos'), and choose correct nouns/adjectives for meaning.

× Yes, of course. Maybe I would like to visit if I have a change. I would like to visit Namsan Tower in South Korea, or I would like to go to USA and see the skyscrapers, skyscraper buildings that I often see in the television.

✓ Yes, of course. Maybe I would like to visit if I have a chance. I would like to visit Namsan Tower in South Korea, or I would like to go to the USA and see the skyscrapers that I often see on television.

'Change' is a wrong word; the correct noun is 'chance'. When referring to countries in English, include the article 'the' before 'USA'. 'Skyscrapers' is enough without adding 'skyscraper buildings'. Use 'on television' not 'in the television'. Suggestion: choose correct collocations ('have a chance', 'on television') and use articles for country abbreviations ('the USA').

× Honestly no I don't like living a great tall building. I'm more grounded person so I would like live better in private area.

✓ Honestly, no. I don't like living in very tall buildings. I'm more of a grounded person, so I would prefer to live in a private area.

When talking about living 'in' a building, include the preposition 'in'. 'A great tall building' is awkward; use 'very tall buildings' or 'a very tall building' depending on meaning. 'I'm more grounded person' needs the structure 'more of a grounded person'. 'I would like live better' is incorrect; use 'I would prefer to live' or 'I prefer to live'. 'Private area' should be 'a private area'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in'), article phrases ('a private area'), and natural comparative structures ('more of a ...', 'prefer').