Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear. Start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific details. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid repetition. For example, say whether there are tall buildings, how common they are, and give a brief specific detail (e.g. a landmark or neighbourhood).

例: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home in Chengdu. In my neighborhood, several modern high-rise apartment blocks and office towers line the main road, so the skyline looks quite dense.

提案: Be more precise and correct verb forms. Give a clear topic sentence about whether you take photos, then add specific reasons and one example. Use simple present for habits and avoid modal confusion. Connect ideas with linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel because I enjoy architecture. For example, last month I photographed an old temple to study its decorations and later compared the pictures to learn about different styles.

提案: Answer with a specific building and one or two reasons why you want to visit. Use linking words to structure the reply (e.g. 'because', 'for example'). Add a short detail about what you would do there or what interests you about its history.

例: Yes. I would like to visit the Wuhou Shrine in Chengdu because it is historically important and well preserved. I want to see the ancient architecture and read the exhibits to learn more about the Three Kingdoms period.

提案: Be concise and correct word choice. Start with a clear statement of preference, then give two specific advantages using linking words (e.g. 'because' or 'for example'). Avoid repeating words and correct awkward phrases. Mention realistic details like views or convenience.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers great views of the sunrise and sunset. For example, from a high-floor apartment I could see the entire city and enjoy quieter surroundings compared with street-level flats.

× Yes, they are called living in Chengdu and Chengdu are covered by tall building.

✓ Yes, people call it 'Living in Chengdu', and Chengdu is full of tall buildings.

Original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect verbs: 'they are called living in Chengdu' lacks a clear subject and title formatting; 'Chengdu are covered by tall building' has subject-verb disagreement and singular/plural errors. Correction clarifies meaning, uses singular 'is' for the city, and plural 'buildings'. Suggestion: identify the subject (Chengdu), use correct verb agreement, and use plural for multiple buildings.

× Yes, it depends on my emotions and feelings. If I were in a good mood, I really enjoyed taking photos or buildings and I want to learn how the buildings were.

✓ Yes, it depends on my emotions and feelings. If I am in a good mood, I really enjoy taking photos of buildings and I want to learn about the buildings.

Mixed tense and incorrect verb forms: 'If I were in a good mood' is subjunctive and implies unreal condition; use present real conditional 'If I am' for habit. 'I really enjoyed taking photos or buildings' wrongly uses past tense 'enjoyed' and preposition 'or'; 'taking photos of buildings' is correct. 'I want to learn how the buildings were' is unclear; use 'learn about the buildings' or 'learn how they were built'. Suggestion: keep present tense for habitual actions, use 'of' after 'photos', and use 'learn about' for general interest.

× Yes, of course, there are many historical buildings around my home and I really want to learn about their history.

✓ Yes, of course, there are many historical buildings around my home, and I really want to learn about their history.

Sentence is mostly correct; added a comma before the conjunction for clarity. Identified as 'There be issue' because sentence uses 'there are' correctly; no grammatical change needed except punctuation. Suggestion: keep the structure 'there are many ...' for existence and add a comma when connecting two independent clauses.

× Yes, actually, I really enjoy living in a tall building. In that case, I can see the sunset set and sunrise, and I can enjoy the whole scenery of our Harissa city I.

✓ Yes, actually, I would really enjoy living in a tall building. In that case, I could see the sunset and the sunrise, and I could enjoy the whole scenery of our Harissa city.

Tense and modal usage inconsistent with hypothetical preference: original uses present 'I really enjoy' though question asks desire; 'would' or 'could' fits better. 'sunset set and sunrise' repeats 'set' mistakenly; use 'sunset and the sunrise'. 'scenery of our Harissa city I' includes stray 'I' and awkward phrasing; 'the whole scenery of our Harissa city' is clearer. Suggestion: use conditional 'would'/'could' when speaking about wanting to live somewhere, remove duplicate words, and place articles appropriately.