Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition. Correct errors like "aren't much tall buildings" → "there aren't many tall buildings" and "go to furthermore to a 10 minute drive" → "drive for about ten minutes."

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. However, if I drive for about ten minutes to the city, I can see many high-rise buildings because I live in a suburb close to the urban centre.

提案: Start with a direct answer, reduce hesitations, and combine related details using linking words. Use correct forms: "a 10-minute drive" and "at night." Add a brief specific example of what you like photographing (e.g., facades, lighting).

例: Yes, I do. I especially photograph tall towers because I love their architecture and the way they are lit at night. For example, when I visit the city about a ten-minute drive away, I often take photos of building facades and illuminated skylines.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and a concise reason, avoid trailing off. Use correct phrases: "I've been eager to visit the Parliament in Canberra" and "I haven't had much time during weekdays." Add one specific detail about what attracts you (architecture, history, tours).

例: I’ve been eager to visit the Parliament in Canberra. I haven’t had much free time during weekdays, but I would like to go because I’m interested in its impressive architecture and guided tours that explain Australia’s political history.

提案: Answer directly and organise reasons with linking words. Correct grammar: "there aren't many people" and avoid repetitive sentences. Explain what "convenient" means with specific examples (amenities, transport).

例: Yes, I would. I prefer living in an apartment because it’s more convenient — for example, apartments often have easy access to public transport, supermarkets and maintenance services, whereas townhouses can be more isolated.

× Well, there aren't much tall buildings near my home, but if I just go to furthermore to a 10 minute drive I can reach to the city and there are lots of buildings in the city but they aren't very close to my home because I live in a suburb.

✓ Well, there aren't many tall buildings near my home, but if I go about a 10-minute drive further I can reach the city, and there are lots of buildings there, although they aren't very close to my home because I live in a suburb.

Countable nouns like 'buildings' require 'many' (not 'much'). Also corrected other small issues for natural phrasing: 'a 10-minute drive' needs hyphens and 'further' or 'further away' fits better than 'furthermore'; removed extra 'to' and fixed 'reach the city' and sentence flow. Suggestion: Use 'many' with plural countable nouns and check word order (e.g., 'a 10-minute drive').

× Yes, I do take pictures of buildings because I really, uh, love the tall towers.

✓ Yes, I take pictures of buildings because I really love tall towers.

The simple present 'I take' is more natural than the emphatic 'I do take' in this context; also remove filler 'uh' and article before 'tall towers' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and avoid unnecessary emphatic forms unless stressing contrast.

× I can find them mostly in the city, which is about, uh, 10 minute drive from my home.

✓ I can find them mostly in the city, which is about a 10-minute drive from my home.

Use 'a' with the countable expression '10-minute drive' and hyphenate '10-minute' as a compound adjective. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Treat time-distance expressions as countable when modified (use 'a' and hyphens).

× And, uh, the towers are really beautiful in the night, especially with lights.

✓ And the towers are really beautiful at night, especially when lit up with lights.

English uses 'at night' not 'in the night' for general statements. 'Especially when lit up' is a more natural phrase than 'with lights'. Suggestion: Use 'at night' for general nighttime descriptions and prefer 'lit up' for illuminated objects.

× Hmm, I've been long waiting to visit parliament which is located in Canberra.

✓ Hmm, I've been waiting for a long time to visit the Parliament, which is in Canberra.

The phrase 'been long waiting' is incorrect; use 'been waiting for a long time' with present perfect continuous meaning. 'Parliament' as a specific building can take the definite article 'the Parliament' and 'which is in Canberra' is more natural. Suggestion: Use 'been waiting for a long time' to express ongoing desire and include 'the' with named institutions when appropriate.

× I don't really get a lot of time during my weekdays but in the future if I get some time I would really love visiting the parliament.

✓ I don't really have a lot of time on weekdays, but in the future if I get some time I would really love to visit the Parliament.

Use 'have' for possession of time ('have a lot of time'), 'on weekdays' is the usual preposition, and 'love to visit' is more natural than 'love visiting' in this conditional future context. Also capitalize and use 'the' for 'Parliament'. Suggestion: Use 'have' for time availability and 'love to visit' after modal or conditional expressions.

× I heard it's very beautiful and.

✓ I heard it's very beautiful.

The original sentence ends with an incomplete conjunction 'and' causing a sentence fragment. Remove the trailing 'and' or complete the sentence with another clause. Suggestion: Avoid leaving sentences unfinished; either finish the thought or end the sentence clearly.

× Yes, I've always leaned towards buildings rather than townhouses because I think they're more convenient.

✓ Yes, I've always leaned toward living in buildings rather than in townhouses because I think they are more convenient.

'Leaned toward' is a more common preposition than 'leaned towards' in some varieties of English (either is acceptable), but more importantly clarify 'living in buildings' to match meaning. 'They're' is ambiguous — clarified to 'they are' referring to buildings. Suggestion: Make the noun phrase explicit when comparing types of housing to avoid ambiguity.

× When we live in a flat, for example, there are lots of people around.

✓ When you live in a flat, for example, there are a lot of people around.

'Lots of' is informal but acceptable; changed 'we' to 'you' to match general statement and used 'a lot of' for slightly more formal speech. Suggestion: Match the pronoun perspective and choose quantifiers appropriate to formality.

× When you live in an inner townhouse, there aren't much people, but when you live in a flat, your neighborhood is filled with a lot of people.

✓ When you live in an inner townhouse, there aren't many people, but when you live in a flat, your neighborhood is filled with a lot of people.

'People' is a countable plural noun and requires 'many' rather than 'much'. Suggestion: Use 'many' with countable plural nouns and 'much' with uncountable nouns.