Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a concise topic sentence and avoid repetition. Give one specific detail (e.g., types of buildings or nearby landmark) and use a linking word to add clarity.

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home in downtown Toronto. For example, there are office skyscrapers and residential condos along the main avenue, so the skyline looks very dense and modern.

提案: Avoid absolute negatives and vague words; give a brief reason and one alternative activity with linking words. Use correct collocations (urban architecture, prefer nature).

例: Not really, I rarely photograph buildings because I prefer natural scenery to urban architecture. Instead, I usually take photos of parks and lakes when I go out, especially during autumn when the colours are beautiful.

提案: Give a direct answer then expand with a specific example of a natural place you would visit and a reason, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: No, I don’t have a particular building I want to visit because I’m not interested in urban architecture. Instead, I would prefer visiting a nature reserve like High Park to watch birds and walk in the forest because it feels peaceful.

提案: Make the main point clear and avoid unclear reasoning. Explain one concrete advantage (e.g., view, facilities) and use linking words to support the reason.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it often offers better views and more amenities. For instance, many high-rise apartments have gyms and rooftop terraces, which would make daily life more convenient.

× I don't take photos of buildings because I don't like urban architectures.

✓ I don't take photos of buildings because I don't like urban architecture.

The noun 'architecture' is an uncountable/collective noun when referring to the style or field; using the plural 'architectures' is incorrect here. Use 'architecture' to refer to the general concept. Suggestion: treat fields and styles (architecture, furniture, music) as uncountable when speaking generally.

× I prefer natures rather than ugly buildings in the city.

✓ I prefer nature to ugly buildings in the city.

The noun 'nature' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'natures.' Also, the comparative expression uses 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X rather than Y.' Suggestion: use 'prefer nature to ugly buildings' for a natural phrasing.

× Unfortunately, there is no building that I would like to visit because I'm not interested in urban architectures.

✓ Unfortunately, there is no building that I would like to visit because I'm not interested in urban architecture.

Again, 'architecture' should be uncountable here. Using 'architectures' is incorrect when speaking about the general field or style. Suggestion: use 'urban architecture' to express lack of interest in city architectural styles.

× I would prefer visiting nature to see birds and forests.

✓ I would prefer to visit nature to see birds and forests.

After 'would prefer' when comparing a choice, the infinitive 'to visit' is more natural than the gerund 'visiting.' While some forms allow gerunds, 'would prefer to' + base verb is the standard, especially when specifying a particular action. Suggestion: use 'would prefer to visit...' for clarity.

× I would like to live in a tall building as usually a high building has more space to accommodate people.

✓ I would like to live in a tall building, because usually a high building has more space to accommodate people.

The adverb 'usually' is misplaced after 'as' and the conjunction 'as' is less natural here. Use 'because' to give a reason and place 'usually' before the clause it modifies. Suggestion: write 'because usually a high building...' or 'as high buildings usually have...'

× In that sense I think I would prefer living in a taller building.

✓ In that sense, I think I would prefer living in a taller building.

This sentence mainly needs a comma after the introductory phrase for clarity; grammatically 'taller building' is fine if comparing to other options. The issue flagged is minor punctuation rather than pluralization, but to follow the list, the sentence is acceptable regarding singular/plural. Suggestion: add a comma after 'In that sense' for readability.