Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., "small town" and "provincial town") and try to use a linking word to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary slightly to show range.

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a small provincial town dominated by low-rise residential houses, so I usually only see skyscrapers when I travel to the nearby city.

提案: Start with a concise topic sentence, then give a specific reason and one concrete example. Watch tense consistency (use present/present perfect) and avoid wordy phrases like "really something I love to watch." Use a linking word such as "because" or "so" clearly to connect reason and result.

例: Yes, I often photograph tall buildings because I find skyscrapers fascinating. For example, whenever I visit a city, I spend time taking pictures of the skyline and architectural details to remember the trip.

提案: Give a direct answer naming the building, then add specific reasons and a short example or detail. Correct the name (Seoul) and avoid vague phrasing like "those"—refer to the building or place. Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I would like to visit a famous building in Seoul, South Korea — for instance, Lotte World Tower. I have only seen it in documentaries and K-dramas, so I would love to see its observation deck and city views in person.

提案: Answer directly and clearly with one strong reason and a brief supporting detail. Avoid filler words like "like" and awkward phrasing. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "although") and keep to two or three sentences maximum.

例: I wouldn't like to live in a tall building long-term because I prefer more space and a quieter environment. Although I did live in a high-rise once, I found it less comfortable than a house with a garden, so I probably wouldn't choose it for the future.

× Yes, I do take photos of tall buildings because seeing skyscrapers is really something I love to watch, especially that I lived in a small town my whole life, so when I go to another city, I took as many pictures as I can.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of tall buildings because seeing skyscrapers is something I really love, especially since I have lived in a small town my whole life, so when I go to another city, I take as many pictures as I can.

Multiple tense and phrasing errors: 'something I love to watch' is awkward for photos — 'something I really love' is clearer. 'Especially that I lived' incorrectly uses past simple; use present perfect 'I have lived' to indicate life experience continuing to present. 'When I go... I took' mixes present and past; change 'took' to present 'take' to match the habitual action. Also reorder words for natural English.'},{