Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "tall buildings", "five-storey") and simple grammar (plural forms, articles). Keep it under 3–4 short sentences and avoid uncertain phrasing like "2 bedding" or "in between."

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. I live in an area of low-rise houses, mostly three- to five-storey buildings, so the skyline is quite low. It feels quiet and spacious compared with the city centre.

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, when). Use natural phrases like "I sometimes take photos of buildings" and improve sentence structure ("the way sunlight hits a building" not "the sunshine of building"). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially when the light is interesting. For example, I like to capture the way sunlight falls on glass facades or unusual shapes and angles because they look dramatic in photos.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give specific reasons and use correct vocabulary ("highest floor", "view of the city"). Avoid filler words like "MMM" and correct grammar ("it is the tallest tower in Korea"). Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: I would like to visit Lotte World Tower because it is the tallest building in Korea. I want to go to the highest observation deck so I can enjoy a panoramic view of the city and take some photos.

提案: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons and correct expressions ("high-price" → "high-priced" or "expensive", "it suggests wealth" instead of "each mean a rich man"). Use 2–3 sentences and linking words like "because" or "so" to make the logic clear. Avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because they are often modern and expensive, which suggests a higher standard of living. For example, tall apartment towers usually have better facilities like a gym and security, so I think it would be comfortable.

× No, there are not 2 bedding near my home because I live in between.

✓ No, there are not two beds near my home because I live in between.

The student used '2 bedding' which is incorrect. 'Bedding' is uncountable and refers to sheets/blankets; likely intended 'two beds' (countable). Use words instead of digits in spoken answers. Also 'are not' is acceptable but more natural: 'there are not two beds'.

× Five floor under five floor buildings.

✓ There are five-story buildings and low-rise buildings (five floors and under).

The original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb and uses an unclear phrase. Rewriting provides subject and verb and clarifies meaning: 'five-story buildings' or 'buildings with five floors or fewer'.

× Yes, sometimes I take a photo of buildings.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings.

'A photo' is singular; when speaking generally about occasional action, use the plural 'photos' or 'a photo sometimes'. Consistency with 'sometimes' favors plural or generic plural form.

× For example, the sunshine of building is beautiful or building shape is unique.

✓ For example, the way the sunlight hits a building is beautiful, or a building's shape is unique.

Original uses awkward noun phrases and missing possessive. Use 'the sunlight' or 'the way the sunlight hits the building' and 'a building's shape' to show possession and improve naturalness.

× I usually take a picture of buildings.

✓ I usually take pictures of buildings.

Same as earlier: use plural 'pictures' when referring to habitual/general action.

× MMM this is tough question.

✓ Hmm, this is a tough question.

Add an article 'a' before 'tough question' and use a standard hesitation interjection 'Hmm'.

× I think I want to visit Lotte Tower because it is tallest tower in Korea and I want to go heist floor and look the city's landscape.

✓ I think I want to visit Lotte Tower because it is the tallest tower in Korea, and I want to go to the highest floor and see the city's landscape.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'tallest tower'. 'Heist' is a misspelling of 'highest'. Need 'go to' before a floor and use 'see' instead of 'look' for viewing a landscape. Also comma and conjunction for sentence flow.

× Yeah I want to live in a tall building because tall building means a high to price building.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a tall building because a tall building usually has a high price.

Missing article 'a' before 'tall building' in second clause; phrase 'high to price' is incorrect word order. Use 'has a high price' or 'is expensive'.

× So each mean a rich man.

✓ So they often mean that the residents are wealthy.

'Each' is wrong here; referent is buildings, so use 'they' or 'tall buildings' and rephrase to 'mean that the residents are wealthy' to express intended meaning. 'Rich man' is gender-specific and ungrammatical in context.

× So I want to live in expensive building such as tall building.

✓ So I want to live in an expensive building, for example a tall one.

Missing article 'an' before 'expensive building' and awkward repetition. Use 'for example a tall one' or 'such as a tall building' and add comma for clarity.