Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid fillers (uh), correct small grammar issues, and give one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if you add a second detail.

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in Lower Hart Fallington, which is mainly low-rise houses, so it feels quiet and family-friendly.

提案: Give a clear yes/no answer first, avoid unclear phrases and filler words, and provide a concise reason or example. Use one or two sentences only and include a linking word if you add a reason.

例: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings, especially when I see interesting architecture or details. For example, I often photograph old facades when I visit the city centre.

提案: Good content and specific detail. Make the answer more fluent by organizing sentences: state the building and why, then add one concrete detail. Use linking words like because or for example, and avoid vague phrases like "everything."

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Cinnamon Lake Hotel because I admire its modern architecture. For example, it has a covered bridge between two buildings and distinctive window designs that look elegant.

提案: Start with a clear direct reply and then give one specific reason using a linking word. Correct word order ("live in a tall building") and avoid repeating the same idea. One or two sentences are enough.

例: No, I don't want to live in a tall building because I prefer a single-family house and a quiet neighbourhood. I find low-rise areas more peaceful and better for outdoor space.

× There's no tall building in UH in my neighborhood areas, so it's just a nice neighborhood for living.

✓ There aren't any tall buildings in my neighborhood, so it's just a nice place to live.

Using 'There's' (there is) with a plural noun is incorrect. Replace with 'There aren't any' or 'There are no' for plural. Also 'neighborhood areas' is redundant and 'nice neighborhood for living' is awkward; use 'nice place to live'.

× Sometimes is is debate and basically yeah, if I see actually.

✓ Sometimes I take photos, and basically, if I see an interesting building, I'll photograph it.

Original has missing subject and verb and unclear fragments. 'Sometimes is is debate' makes no sense; likely student meant they sometimes take photos. Provide clear subject 'I' and verb 'take photos'. Add condition clause 'if I see an interesting building' and a clear main clause 'I'll photograph it' to complete the sentence structure.

× I would like to visit the Cinnamon Lake UH Hotel and it was in between the two buildings.

✓ I would like to visit the Cinnamon Lake Hotel; it is between two buildings.

Mixing conditional/wish 'would like' with past 'was' is inconsistent. Use present tense 'is' to describe the hotel's current location. Also remove unnecessary 'UH' filler. Use a semicolon or separate sentences for clarity.

× They have a bridge as well.

✓ It has a bridge as well.

Refers to a single hotel, so use singular pronoun 'it' instead of plural 'they'. If referring to multiple buildings, specify that; here the hotel is singular.

× I do not like it living in the building.

✓ I do not like living in a building.

'Like it living' is incorrect word order and extra pronoun 'it' is unnecessary. Use the gerund 'living' after 'like' and include the article 'a' before 'building'.

× I like a single home and I like the quiet neighborhood.

✓ I prefer a detached house, and I like the quiet neighborhood.

'Single home' is nonstandard; 'detached house' or 'single-family home' is better. Also using 'prefer' sounds more natural when contrasting with living in a tall building. Ensure article 'the' before 'quiet neighborhood' is correct if referring to the previously mentioned neighborhood.