Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và gặp lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm/văn phong lủng củng. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn (1 câu chủ đề) rồi thêm 1-2 câu chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “there are a lot of buildings” hoặc “there aren’t many tall buildings”). Dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc (e.g., “because”, “so”).

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area. Instead, the surroundings are full of trees and open fields, which offer many beautiful views.

提案: Nội dung hơi dài dòng, lặp từ và có nhiều “umm”. Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi giải thích ngắn gọn lý do kèm một ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh mệnh đề dài không cần thiết; dùng linking words như “because” hoặc “because of” để liên kết ý. Cải thiện ngữ pháp: “I enjoy taking photos because…”

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of buildings because it helps me see details I might miss otherwise. For example, I like photographing old houses to capture their unique doors and windows.

提案: Câu trả lời không trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi và chứa thông tin lạc đề (đọc sách). Hãy nêu một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (“No, but…”) rồi nêu một lựa chọn cụ thể nếu có (tên địa điểm hoặc loại công trình) và lý do rõ ràng. Dùng linking words như “instead” hoặc “rather” để chuyển ý. Tránh các tiếng “uh/mmm”.

例: Not really; I don’t usually visit city landmarks. Instead, I would prefer to visit a mountain village in Vietnam because I enjoy natural scenery and traditional architecture.

提案: Trả lời ngắn và lặp từ, ngữ pháp sai (tense và cấu trúc). Hãy bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, giải thích lý do bằng 1-2 câu và kết thúc bằng điều kiện hoặc tương lai nếu cần. Sử dụng cấu trúc điều kiện đơn giản: “I might consider it in the future if…”.

例: No, I wouldn’t like to live in a tall building at the moment because I prefer quieter, more open areas. I might consider living in a high-rise in the future if it made my commute much easier.

× Actually, no, there is a lot of buildings in my hometown only by my home, simply because I am living in rural areas.

✓ Actually, no, there are a lot of buildings in my hometown near my home, simply because I live in a rural area.

The verb 'there is' should agree with the plural noun 'buildings', so use 'there are' (subject-verb agreement). 'By my home' is awkward; 'near my home' is more natural. 'I am living' is present continuous implying temporary; use simple present 'I live' for general facts. 'Rural areas' should be singular 'a rural area' or 'rural areas' with appropriate article; here 'a rural area' fits better.

× A lot of trees around my ambience and so every stunning views appear.

✓ There are a lot of trees around my surroundings, so every view is stunning.

The sentence lacked a verb and used incorrect nouns. Use 'There are' to introduce existence and 'around my surroundings' (or simply 'around me'). 'Ambience' is uncountable and was misused; 'surroundings' is more appropriate. 'Every stunning views' mixes 'every' with plural 'views' — use 'every view' (singular) or 'stunning views'. Also change 'appear' to 'is' for natural phrasing.

× Of course, yes, taking photos to capture every beautiful moment is the most wonderful way I enjoy making me step out my comfort zone and umm, have a last time with my own perspective through pictures.

✓ Of course, yes, taking photos to capture beautiful moments is the most wonderful activity; it helps me step out of my comfort zone and see things from my own perspective through pictures.

The original mixed noun phrases and verb forms. 'Taking photos... is' is fine, but 'the most wonderful way I enjoy making me' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'is the most wonderful activity' or 'It helps me'. Use 'step out of my comfort zone' (correct preposition) and 'see things from my own perspective'. Avoid 'have a last time' which is unclear.

× MMM actually no, I don't like reading a lot and visiting some central areas is not my cup of tea.

✓ Actually, no, I don't like reading a lot, and visiting city centers is not my cup of tea.

'MMM' and filler words should be removed for clarity. 'Visiting some central areas' is awkward; 'visiting city centers' or 'central areas' with 'city' clarifies meaning. Use a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× I'd like to enjoy stunning views or landscape in Vietnam. Uh, which is on the mountainous area I think.

✓ I'd like to enjoy stunning views or the landscape in Vietnam, especially in the mountainous areas, I think.

'Landscape' may need the definite article 'the' here. 'Which is on the mountainous area' is a fragment and uses incorrect preposition; use 'in the mountainous areas' and connect it to the previous sentence. Keep tense simple present for general preference.

× Umm, I think uh no for now. Umm 'cause I don't really like tall building or sky.

✓ I don't think so for now because I don't really like tall buildings or heights.

Fix filler words and use 'I don't think so' for clarity. 'Tall building' should be plural 'tall buildings' when speaking generally. 'Or sky' is unnatural; use 'heights' to express discomfort with high places.

× A skyscraper which is not a cup of tea.

✓ A skyscraper is not my cup of tea.

The original is a sentence fragment. Use a full sentence 'A skyscraper is not my cup of tea.' Also use 'my cup of tea' (possessive) for the idiom.

× However in the future, so when I had to commute to work or study.

✓ However, in the future, if I have to commute to work or study, I might consider it.

'When I had to' is past tense and doesn't fit the future conditional context. Use 'if I have to' or 'when I have to' for future situations. The original is a fragment; add a main clause to complete the sentence and match the conditional/future meaning.