Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural, concise, and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Avoid repetition and incorrect articles/plurals.

例: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. I live in a small, historic town where zoning rules prevent high-rise construction, so most buildings are low and preserved for their heritage. For example, the main square is lined with two- and three-storey traditional houses rather than modern towers.

提案: Clarify and streamline your response: give a direct topic sentence and one or two specific details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues and avoid repetition.

例: Sometimes. If a building has unusual architecture or vibrant colors, I'll take a photo because it catches my eye. However, generally I'm not very interested in photographing buildings unless they have unique design features.

提案: Be specific and concise: name the building, give one or two precise reasons, and use linking words. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'a UNESCO World Heritage site', 'on my wish list').

例: Yes. I would love to visit the Sagrada Família in Barcelona because it is a UNESCO World Heritage site with very intricate and unconventional architecture. I've read that its facades are full of symbolic sculptures, which is why it's on my wish list.

提案: Give a clear current preference first, then briefly contrast with past feelings using linking words. Avoid filler words and be concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Now I prefer living in a single-family house with a backyard because I enjoy outdoor space and privacy. When I was a child I wanted to live in a modern high-rise, but my priorities have changed as I value a garden and quieter surroundings.

× I live in a small and Old Town and there are limitations in building a tall buildings like towers or even just distract old buildings and make new buildings.

✓ I live in a small and old town and there are limitations on building tall buildings like towers or even just demolishing old buildings to make new ones.

Errors: incorrect use of articles and capitalization ('Old' should be lowercase), redundant article before plural 'buildings' ('a tall buildings' is wrong), incorrect preposition ('in' -> 'on' with 'limitations on'), wrong verb 'distract' used instead of 'demolish' and awkward phrase 'make new buildings' better as 'make new ones'. Suggestion: use lowercase for common adjectives, omit 'a' before plural nouns, use 'limitations on' to indicate restrictions, choose correct verbs (demolish) and use 'ones' to avoid repetition.

× If I see a a special architecture or a mix of different and vibrant colors I would like to take pictures.

✓ If I see a special piece of architecture or a mix of different and vibrant colors, I would like to take pictures.

Errors: duplicate word 'a a', incorrect noun usage 'architecture' usually countable as 'a piece of architecture' or 'a special building'. The conditional structure is fine. Suggestion: remove duplicate article, use 'a special piece of architecture' or 'a special building', add comma before the main clause for clarity.

× But in general I'm not very interested in taking pictures of buildings.

✓ But in general I'm not very interested in taking pictures of buildings.

No grammatical correction needed; sentence is correct. Included to show it was checked and requires no change.

× Yes, I like to visit the churches.

✓ Yes, I like visiting churches.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' unless referring to specific churches. Also more natural verb form is 'visiting' to express general preference. Suggestion: drop 'the' and use gerund for general statements.

× In Barcelona there is a church that is UNESCO heritage and it has a very special and complex structure and architecture.

✓ In Barcelona there is a church that is a UNESCO World Heritage site and it has a very special and complex structure and architecture.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'UNESCO heritage', and more idiomatic expression is 'UNESCO World Heritage site'. Suggestion: add 'a' and use the standard phrase for clarity.

× It is one of my wish list to visit that building.

✓ It is on my wish list to visit that building.

Errors: incorrect preposition 'of' and missing 'on' needed in the phrase 'on my wish list'. Also 'wish list' requires 'my' and 'one of' is redundant when using 'on my wish list'; keep 'It is on my wish list' or 'It is one of the buildings on my wish list'. Suggestion: use 'on my wish list' or 'one of the items on my wish list'.

× When I was a kid, I really liked to live in a modern tall apartment complex, and I didn't like the old house that we had.

✓ When I was a kid, I really wanted to live in a modern tall apartment complex, and I didn't like the old house that we had.

Errors: 'liked to live' is awkward for a past desire; 'wanted to live' or 'would like to live' is more natural. Tense of second clause is correct ('didn't like'). Suggestion: use 'wanted' to express past desire.

× Uh, we had a single family house, but now I really like to live in a single family house with backyard.

✓ Uh, we had a single-family house, but now I really like living in a single-family house with a backyard.

Errors: compounds 'single-family' should be hyphenated when used as an adjective, missing article before 'backyard' ('a backyard'), and more natural present preference is 'like living' rather than 'like to live'. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives, include articles before singular nouns, and use gerund for general preferences.