Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason. Avoid repetition and capitalize words properly. Use linking words like "because" or "due to" to connect ideas.

例: No, there aren't many tall buildings near my home. My town is historical, so the local council restricts new high-rise developments to preserve the old architecture.

提案: Good clear response. Improve coherence by using linking words and more specific examples. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repeating similar words.

例: Usually I don't photograph buildings because I prefer people and nature. However, if a building has striking architecture or brightly colored facades, I would photograph it as an interesting subject.

提案: Correct grammar and eliminate repetition. Give one or two specific details about the building (e.g., why its history or architecture interests you) and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I'd like to visit an ancient mosque in India because it has a long history and intricate architecture. For example, I'm curious to see its ornate carvings and spacious courtyards in person.

提案: Good content and contrast, but fix grammar and remove repeated words. Use a clear linking phrase to show the contrast between past desire and current preference, and add one specific reason for preferring a house.

例: As a child I wanted to live in a modern high-rise, but now I prefer a single-family house because it offers more privacy and space for a backyard where I can garden.

× I live in a small and Old Town and there are not a lot of tall buildings near my house because of limitations for buildings and new complexes and renovating to keep the old part.

✓ I live in a small, old town and there are not a lot of tall buildings near my house because of limitations on buildings, new complexes, and renovations to keep the old part.

Errors: incorrect capitalization of 'Old' (should be lowercase), incorrect article/capitalization for 'Town', missing comma between adjectives, and awkward noun forms. Use lowercase for common nouns and adjectives (old town). Use a comma between coordinate adjectives (small, old town). Use 'limitations on' rather than 'for', and use plural noun 'renovations' to match parallelism. These changes correct article/capitalization issues and improve grammatical parallel structure.

× I usually don't take photos of buildings.

✓ I usually don't take photos of buildings.

No grammatical change necessary. Sentence correctly uses the present simple to describe habitual action.

× I'm mostly interested in taking photos of people and nature.

✓ I'm mostly interested in taking photos of people and nature.

No grammatical change necessary. Present continuous 'I'm mostly interested' correctly expresses current general interest.

× But if there is a special architecture or a collection of vibrant colors, I would like to take a photo.

✓ But if there is special architecture or a display of vibrant colors, I would like to take a photo.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun here; 'special architecture' is preferred to 'a special architecture'. 'Collection' suggests items gathered; 'display' or 'array' fits visual features better. The original structure isn't grammatically wrong for verb forms but articles and noun choice needed adjustment.

× When I was a child I really wished to live in a modern and tall apartment complex, but now that I'm older I would like to live in a single family house that I can have more more privacy and access to the backyard and gardening to garden.

✓ When I was a child, I really wanted to live in a modern, tall apartment complex, but now that I'm older I would like to live in a single-family house so I can have more privacy and access to the backyard for gardening.

Use 'wanted' rather than 'wished' for past desire in this context (more natural past tense). Add a comma after the introductory clause. 'Modern, tall' needs a comma between adjectives. 'Single-family' is a compound adjective requiring a hyphen. Remove the duplicated 'more'. Use 'so I can' rather than 'that I can have' for clarity. 'Backyard for gardening' is more natural than 'backyard and gardening to garden'. These changes correct past-tense word choice, punctuation, adjective order, redundancy, and awkward phrasing.

× Yes, I would like to visit the ancient mosque in India. It has a long history and has a very complex architecture. So I I would like to see that building.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the ancient mosque in India. It has a long history and very complex architecture. So I would like to see that building.

Remove duplicated 'I'. 'Architecture' is uncountable here, so 'very complex architecture' is correct without 'a'. Also streamline repetition of 'has' by using one verb for clarity. These corrections fix subject-verb agreement and article usage issues.