Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (prepositions, articles, verb forms), and avoid repetition. Add one or two specific details using linking words (for example, 'some are residential while others are offices') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. Most were built recently; some are apartment blocks for residents, while others contain offices, so the area feels quite modern and busy.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and correct verb forms, and give a brief reason with linking words. Be specific about what you find boring or why privacy concerns matter. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I find it uninteresting. Besides, I'm cautious about photographing private property since owners might feel uncomfortable or see it as intrusive.

提案: Open with a direct topic sentence naming the building, correct the name and article use, and give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words like 'because' or 'since'. Keep it natural and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I'd love to visit the Taj Mahal in India because I've admired its photos since childhood and I'm fascinated by its architecture and history. I haven't had the chance yet, but when I travel to India I will definitely go.

提案: Give a clear reasoned response and avoid unrelated or unclear statements. Use linking words ('because', 'so') and correct phrasing ('prefer a small house in my hometown'). Remove confusing sentences (the pizza comment) and provide a specific reason (space, quiet, family).

例: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I prefer a small house in my hometown in India because it's quieter, offers more outdoor space for my family, and feels more traditional and comfortable.

× Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings in near my house especially.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of tall buildings near my house, especially.

The preposition 'in near' is incorrect; use 'near' alone to indicate proximity. Also add a comma before 'especially' for clarity.

× They are all built in recent time and they all they all are for residents people and some of them are for the offices and and I think it provide a greater residential home for the.

✓ They were all built recently, and they are for residents; some of them are offices. I think they provide good residential homes.

Use 'built recently' (adverb) instead of 'built in recent time'. Correct word order and remove repetition 'they all they all'. Use 'residents' or 'residential' appropriately; 'residents people' is incorrect. Use plural 'homes' and 'provide' to agree with plural subject 'they'. Simplify sentence to match present facts.

× I don't like take photos of buildings because it's a boring thing to me and also I believe that taking somebody's private properties photos can get them offended so I always avoid them.

✓ I don't like taking photos of buildings because it's boring to me, and I believe taking photos of someone's private property can offend them, so I always avoid it.

After 'don't like' use the gerund 'taking'. 'It's a boring thing to me' is awkward; use 'it's boring to me'. Use 'someone's private property' (singular) and 'can offend them' or 'can offend the owner'. Use 'avoid it' to refer to the action.

× Yes, there is A1 building in India that I would love to visit is a Taj Mahal.

✓ Yes, there is a building in India that I would love to visit: the Taj Mahal.

Use the article 'a' before 'building' and the definite article 'the' before 'Taj Mahal' because it is a specific, unique monument. Also restructure sentence for clarity.

× I see their photos from my childhood and I always desire to visit there but I don't get any time to visit.

✓ I have seen its photos since my childhood, and I have always wanted to visit, but I haven't had time to go.

Use present perfect 'have seen' and 'have always wanted' to describe experiences from childhood to now. Use 'its photos' for a singular monument and 'haven't had time to go' is more natural than 'don't get any time to visit'.

× So once I visit India, I will definitely visit there.

✓ So once I visit India, I will definitely go there.

Use 'go there' instead of repeating 'visit' which is redundant. 'Visit there' is less natural; 'visit' a place can be used but 'go there' is smoother.

× No, I don't want to live in a tall building. I would rather prefer to live in a small house with my family in my back home India in a small town because I want to. I want to prefer pizza rather than living in tall building.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building. I would prefer to live in a small house with my family in my hometown in India, in a small town. I prefer that to living in a tall building.

Do not use both 'would rather' and 'prefer' together; choose one. 'My back home India' is incorrect; use 'my hometown in India'. 'I want to' is unnecessary. 'I want to prefer pizza' is irrelevant and unclear; likely a mistake. Use 'I prefer that to living in a tall building' to compare choices.