Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변은 직접적이고 이해하기 쉬우나 더 자연스럽고 구체적인 표현으로 개선할 수 있습니다. 예를 들어 'a lot of' 대신 다른 표현을 사용하고 건물의 용도나 밀집 정도를 수치나 비교로 구체화하면 좋습니다. 또한 한두 개의 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 이어보세요.

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For instance, the neighborhood is full of high-rise apartment blocks and several multistory department stores, so the skyline feels quite dense.

提案: 아이디어는 괜찮지만 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. 부정문을 더 간결하게 만들고 이유를 더 명확히 기술하세요. 'they look the same'와 같은 표현을 고치고 linking phrase(However, when I travel abroad)로 문장 연결을 향상시키세요.

例: Not really. I rarely photograph tall buildings in Korea because many of them look very similar, so they don't catch my eye. However, when I travel abroad I like to take pictures of iconic landmarks, such as Tokyo Tower.

提案: 응답의 내용은 흥미롭지만 발음 표기 오류(고유명사)와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 건물 이름을 정확히 말하고, 문장을 간결하게 정리하세요. 숫자나 이유(>100 floors) 같은 구체적 정보는 좋으니 문법적으로 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

例: I'd like to visit the Roten Tower in Songfar because it houses luxury hotels and many facilities, including shopping malls and restaurants. Also, since it has over 100 floors, I expect the views from the top to be spectacular.

提案: 주제를 바로 말한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 시제와 복수형 사용 오류('a high-rise building' 등)와 표현의 명확성이 필요합니다. 감정 설명을 더 구체적으로 하고 연결어(However, when I was younger)를 사용해 문장을 개선하세요.

例: I've lived in a high-rise building of about fifty floors when I was younger, but I wouldn't live in one again. On windy days the building used to sway, which made me feel quite uneasy.

× There are a lot of tall buildings around my home, such as apartments or department stores.

✓ There are a lot of tall buildings around my home, such as apartment buildings and department stores.

The phrase 'such as apartments or department stores' mixes countable plural 'apartments' with a general category; 'apartment buildings' is the correct collocation to refer to tall residential buildings. Use parallel structure when listing examples (plural noun + and + plural noun).

× Actually I don't enjoy taking photos of tall buildings because there is a lot of building in Korea and they look same so they don't give me attention.

✓ Actually I don't enjoy taking photos of tall buildings because there are a lot of buildings in Korea and they all look the same, so they don't catch my attention.

Multiple issues: 'there is a lot of building' should be 'there are a lot of buildings' (singular/plural and 'there be' issue). 'they look same' needs 'the same' or 'look alike'; more natural is 'they all look the same'. 'they don't give me attention' is unnatural; use 'they don't catch my attention'. Use plural verb 'are' with plural noun 'buildings' and correct adjective phrase 'the same'.

× But when I go to abroad I enjoy taking photos of uh, popular landscapes, for example Tokyo Tower.

✓ But when I go abroad I enjoy taking photos of popular landmarks, for example Tokyo Tower.

Do not use 'go to abroad'; correct is 'go abroad'. 'Popular landscapes' is odd for photos of buildings; 'landmarks' is better. Also remove filler 'uh'. Keep gerund 'taking' is fine.

× I like to visit the Rotten Tower in Song Far because it has luxury hotels and many facilities such as shopping malls and restaurants.

✓ I would like to visit the Rotten Tower in Song Far because it has luxury hotels and many facilities such as shopping malls and restaurants.

The phrase 'I like to visit' is grammatical but 'I would like to visit' better expresses desire for a place not yet visited. No article errors here; primary correction changes modality for appropriateness. (If referring to a specific tower, 'the Rotten Tower' is fine.)

× In addition, they have it have one it have more than 100 floors, so the view will be beautiful.

✓ In addition, it has more than 100 floors, so the view would be beautiful.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'they have it have one it have' is ungrammatical. Use singular pronoun 'it' for 'the Rotten Tower' and singular verb 'has'. Also use 'would be' or 'will be' depending on hypothetical vs certain; 'would be' is polite/hypothetical.

× Live in a tall building.

✓ Would you like me to talk about living in a tall building? Or: I lived in a high-rise building of about 50 floors when I was younger, but I wouldn't live in one again because on windy days I can feel the building sway and it makes me afraid.

Original fragment 'Live in a tall building.' is not a complete answer. Provide a full sentence. Also corrected 'high rise buildings where about 50 floors' to 'a high-rise building of about 50 floors' (article, hyphenation, singular/plural). 'I can feel the buildings ways' should be 'feel the building sway'.

× I lived in a high rise buildings where about 50 floors when I was younger but I wouldn't live in one again because on windy days I can feel the buildings ways and it makes me feel afraid.

✓ I lived in a high-rise building of about 50 floors when I was younger, but I wouldn't live in one again because on windy days I can feel the building sway and it makes me feel afraid.

Several errors fixed: 'a high rise buildings' -> 'a high-rise building' (article + singular + hyphen), 'where about 50 floors' -> 'of about 50 floors' (correct preposition), 'buildings ways' -> 'building sway' (noun/verb misuse). Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.