Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、语法正确并直截了当。避免犹豫词（uh, um）和重复，改用一个清晰的主题句并给出简短理由或例子。例如说明你住在郊区、周围建筑高度以及对生活的影响。

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because I live in a suburban area. Most of the houses are low-rise, so I enjoy more open space and greenery around my neighborhood.

提案: 回答需要简洁、时态一致并使用连词提升连贯性。去掉多余填充词，说明何时、为什么拍摄并给出具体例子或地点。控制在最多五句内。

例: Yes, I like photographing buildings, especially when I travel. For example, on my last trip to Barcelona I photographed Gaudí’s architecture because of its unique shapes and colours.

提案: 需要更连贯的叙述并修正时态与语法错误。先给出主题句说明想去的建筑，再补充一次访问的时间和原因，描述具体记忆以增强细节。去掉多余停顿词。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Chicho Art Museum again. I went there several years ago and still remember the striking exhibits and peaceful atmosphere, which made a lasting impression on me.

提案: 回答要更准确和流畅。用一两句说明原因并举例具体好处（例如视野、采光、设施）。避免重复与填充词，注意主谓一致与词序。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because large windows would give me great views and lots of natural light. It would also feel more modern and convenient, as high-rise buildings often have better facilities.

× Actually not because I live in a outskirt area.

✓ Actually not, because I live in an outskirt area. -> Actually not, because I live in an outskirt area. (better: in an outlying area / in the outskirts)

句子存在冠词与名词搭配问题以及用词不自然。“a outskirt area”不正确，单数可用“an outlying area”或更常见的复数短语“the outskirts”。建议使用“in the outskirts”或“in an outlying area”。 改进建议：把“a outskirt area”改为“the outskirts”或者“an outlying area”。

× So uh, there have there isn't uh, many tall buildings.

✓ So, there aren't many tall buildings.

原句结构混乱且包含冗余成分“there have there isn't”。正确的否定存在句应为“there aren't many tall buildings”。中文建议：简化句子，使用“there are”构造的否定形式“there aren't”。

× For me, I like take photos for buildings actually,

✓ For me, I like taking photos of buildings, actually.

动词“like”后面若接动名词作一般喜好，应使用动词-ing形式，即“like taking”。此外介词应为“photos of buildings”而不是“photos for buildings”。建议记住常用搭配：like doing sth, take photos of sth。

× especially when I was a travel, I saw the beautiful building, I first time to take it to take photo for it because I want to.

✓ Especially when I was traveling, I saw a beautiful building; it was the first time I took a photo of it because I wanted to.

此句包含多个时态和结构错误： - “a travel”应为动名词“traveling”或“on a trip”； - “the beautiful building”若为首次提及用不定冠词“a beautiful building”； - “I first time to take it to take photo for it”不符合英语习惯，正确为“it was the first time I took a photo of it”； - 最后“because I want to”需要过去式“wanted”以与过去时态一致。建议：表达过去经历用过去时并按英语习惯说“the first time I did sth”或“it was the first time I had done sth”。

× Actually, yes, the Chicho Art Museum is my favorite building, so I would like to visit again.

✓ Actually, yes, the Chicho Art Museum is my favorite building, so I would like to visit it again.

句子主要正确，但缺少宾语“it”使句子不完整。建议在“visit again”前加上“it”（visit it again）以指代具体建筑。中文建议：动词“visit”需要一个宾语，补上“it”。

× Uh, when, uh, several years ago I first time to went to there.

✓ Several years ago I went there for the first time.

该句时态与结构不正确： - “first time to went to there”语法错误，正确应为“for the first time”或“went there for the first time”； - “went”已为过去式，去掉不必要的“To”。建议按正确顺序表达时间状语+动词+地点。中文建议：用“went there for the first time”表达“第一次去那里”。

× So, uh, that is, uh, forgettable memory.

✓ So, that is an unforgettable memory. / So, that is a memory I won't forget.

原句“forgettable memory”的意思是“容易忘记的记忆”，与语境不符。应使用“unforgettable memory”表示“难忘的回忆”。此外冠词“a”需与形容词连用“an unforgettable memory”。中文建议：根据语境选择正确形容词，若想表达“难忘”用“unforgettable”。

× Yes, I would like to, uh, live in a tall building because uh, the tall building have a uh, or have a big window and the, uh sun and the sunshine, uh, can through the window into the our room.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the tall building has a big window, and the sun and the sunshine can come through the window into our room.

此长句存在多处错误： - 主谓不一致：“the tall building have”应为“has”； - 不需要重复“have a uh, or have a big window”； - “can through the window into the our room”语序与动词缺失，正确为“can come through the window into our room”； - 去掉多余定冠词“the our room”应为“our room”。中文建议：注意主语单复数和动词形式一致，简化重复表达，并把动词放在恰当位置，例如“the sun can come through the window into our room”。