Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether there are tall buildings, then give one or two specific supporting details (location, number, appearance) using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundant phrases and unclear words like "low light building" and "quite significant and clearly real for the nature."

例: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home. Most of the houses here are low-rise residential buildings, usually two or three storeys high, so the area feels quiet and close to nature.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason and a specific example. Use correct tense and nouns (e.g., "old buildings from the 1950s"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas. Avoid vague adjectives like "joyous" for buildings.

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially old ones from the 1950s, because I like their architectural details. For example, there is a 1950s library near my house with ornate windows that I photographed last month.

提案: Be specific about the building and why you want to visit. Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the building, then give concrete reasons (architecture, history, interior features) and one linking phrase. Check grammar: say "I'd like to visit the Oblahout because..." and use singular/plural correctly.

例: I'd like to visit a building called Oblahout, which is near my home. I want to see the interior because I've heard the architecture is grand and the decoration is very ornate, especially the main hall.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "for example." Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "low-rise building" rather than unclear phrases like "granny fat"). Keep answers concise and grammatically correct.

例: I prefer living in a low-rise building rather than a tall one because I worry about emergencies such as fires. For example, in a two-storey house it would be easier and quicker to evacuate if something happened.

× On my memory there are no tall buildings next to my home that I live in Altima.

✓ In my memory, there are no tall buildings next to the home where I live in Altima.

Use of 'On my memory' is incorrect; native phrasing is 'In my memory' or better 'As far as I remember'. Also 'next to my home that I live in Altima' is awkward and ungrammatical. Replace with 'next to the home where I live in Altima' to correctly link the clause and keep the existential construction 'there are'. Suggestion: say 'As far as I remember, there are no tall buildings next to the home where I live in Altima.'

× They are just only low light building.

✓ They are just low-rise buildings.

'Low light building' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'low-rise buildings' (adjective form) and plural to match 'they'. 'Just only' is redundant; use 'just' or 'only'. Suggestion: say 'They are just low-rise buildings.'

× It's quite significant and clearly real for the nature.

✓ That is quite unremarkable and natural.

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect collocations: 'significant' and 'clearly real for the nature' do not convey a natural description of buildings. 'Unremarkable' or 'not very tall' and 'natural' or 'in harmony with the surroundings' would be appropriate depending on intended meaning. Adjust adjectives to match intended idea. Suggestion: say 'It is not very tall and fits in with the natural surroundings.'

× I love to take a photo of building especially the old building right late 1950.

✓ I love to take photos of buildings, especially the old ones from the late 1950s.

Several issues: 'a photo of building' needs plural and article forms: 'photos of buildings'. 'right late 1950' is ungrammatical; correct expression is 'from the late 1950s'. Use plural 'photos' to match general habit. Suggestion: say 'I love taking photos of buildings, especially old ones from the late 1950s.'

× They have a lot of buildings where I live in.

✓ There are a lot of buildings where I live.

Using 'They have' incorrectly refers to buildings as owners. The existential construction 'There are' correctly states quantity of buildings. Also remove redundant 'in' at the end of the clause. Suggestion: say 'There are a lot of buildings where I live.'

× They are all building an old architect subscribe beautiful and have very joyous.

✓ They are all old buildings with beautiful architecture and a joyful atmosphere.

The original contains incorrect word choices and word order: 'building an old architect subscribe beautiful' is ungrammatical. Use 'old buildings' and 'beautiful architecture'. 'Have very joyous' should be 'have a joyful atmosphere' or 'are very pleasant.' Suggestion: say 'They are all old buildings with beautiful architecture and a pleasant atmosphere.'

× There is a building that's called Oblahout.

✓ There is a building called Oblahout.

'That's called' is acceptable in speech but 'called' is more concise and standard in writing. The existential 'There is' is fine. Suggestion: 'There is a building called Oblahout.'

× It has been nearby very often, but I love to see inside.

✓ It has been nearby for a long time, but I would love to see inside.

'Nearby very often' is not a correct temporal or locational phrase. Use 'nearby for a long time' to indicate prolonged proximity. Also 'I love to see inside' should be conditional/polite 'I would love to see inside' or 'I would like to see inside.' Suggestion: say 'It has been nearby for a long time, but I would like to see inside.'

× I want to see architect in there, they said it's a huge and very beautiful inside.

✓ I want to see the architecture inside; they say it is huge and very beautiful.

'See architect in there' is wrong; 'architecture' or 'the interior' should be used. 'They said it's a huge and very beautiful inside' needs article removal and correct adjective order: 'it is huge and very beautiful inside' or 'the interior is huge and very beautiful.' Use reported speech tense consistently: 'they say' if still true. Suggestion: 'I want to see the architecture inside; they say the interior is huge and very beautiful.'

× I prefer living in the granny fat, just only one or two four, that's it.

✓ I prefer living in a low-rise building, just one or two floors, that's it.

'The granny fat' is nonsensical; likely intended 'a granny flat' (a small single-storey unit) or 'low-rise building'. Use 'one or two floors' to describe height. 'Just only' is redundant; use 'just' alone. Suggestion: 'I prefer living in a low-rise building, just one or two floors.'

× I'm rather not staying in that tall building in case it's emergency fire or something happened so we can just run away from it easy.

✓ I would rather not live in a tall building in case of an emergency like a fire; that way we could evacuate easily.

Many issues: 'I'm rather not staying' should be 'I would rather not live'. 'in case it's emergency fire or something happened' should be 'in case of an emergency such as a fire or something happening'. 'so we can just run away from it easy' needs formal phrasing: 'we could evacuate easily.' Use semicolon or conjunctions to connect clauses properly. Suggestion: 'I would rather not live in a tall building in case of an emergency like a fire, so we could evacuate easily.'

× That is about concerning.

✓ That is my concern.

'About concerning' is ungrammatical. Use 'That is concerning' or more naturally 'That is my concern.' Choose a noun phrase or adjective accordingly. Suggestion: 'That is my concern.'