Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ понятен, но содержит ошибки и нерелевантную информацию. Устраните лишние слова (например, «I really like the beer» не относится к вопросу), исправьте грамматику и артикли («the office buildings» → «office buildings»). Дайте связное краткое утверждение и при необходимости добавьте одно конкретное уточнение, используя связку: «because» или «for example».

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. I live in a city, so there are many modern apartment blocks and office buildings. For example, there is a 30-storey residential tower just two streets away.

提案: Ответ в целом уместен, но содержит неверную фразу («tall skies carpets») и можно добавить связующее слово для плавности. Замените неверное словосочетание конкретным описанием, используйте слова вроде «especially», «for example», «because» для связности и добавьте короткий пример того, что привлекает внимание.

例: Yes, sometimes I take photos of buildings, especially when they look unusual or striking. I like modern architecture because of its clean lines and glass facades; for example, I often photograph a nearby cultural centre with a curved steel roof.

提案: Хороший прямой ответ и логичное развитие мысли, но можно сделать его более конкретным и добавить связку («for example» или «such as») и причину, почему вы хотите посетить эти здания. Также избегайте общих фраз, добавьте конкретный пример здания.

例: Yes, I would like to visit famous buildings around the world, such as the Burj Khalifa and the Colosseum. For example, seeing the Burj Khalifa in person would be amazing because of its height and modern engineering.

提案: Ответ хороший, но фраза «noisy and cloudy» смешивает звук и погоду — «cloudy» не относится к зданию. Уточните недостатки (например, «noisy» или «elevator problems», «windy») и используйте связку «however» корректно. Дайте 1–2 конкретных причин за и против.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because the view would be amazing and I would enjoy evening city lights. However, it could be noisy on busy floors and elevators can be crowded during rush hour.

× I live in a city so there are many modern apartments and the office buildings.

✓ I live in a city, so there are many modern apartments and office buildings.

The definite article 'the' before 'office buildings' is unnecessary when speaking generally about a category. Remove 'the' to make it plural and general: 'office buildings'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause 'I live in a city' for clarity.

× I really like the beer, especially at night.

✓ I really like the beer there, especially at night.

The sentence is ambiguous and likely missing a location reference. If the student meant they like 'the beer' at that place, add 'there' to clarify. If they meant 'beer' in general, use 'beer' without 'the': 'I really like beer, especially at night.' The error involves article and reference, but primarily adjective/adverb placement causing ambiguity.

× I like modern architecture and the tall skies carpets.

✓ I like modern architecture and the tall skyscrapers.

The phrase 'tall skies carpets' is incorrect — likely a mistaken compound. The correct noun is 'skyscrapers' (tall buildings). This is a word choice/phrase formation error; replace the incorrect phrase with the proper noun 'skyscrapers'.

× Yes, I would like to visit famous buildings around the world like skyscrapers or historical places.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit famous buildings around the world, such as skyscrapers and historic sites.

Use 'such as' to introduce examples and maintain parallel structure: 'skyscrapers and historic sites' are parallel. 'Historical places' is acceptable but 'historic sites' is more natural. Add a comma before the example phrase.

× However, sometimes it can be noisy and cloudy.

✓ However, it can sometimes be noisy and cloudy.

Adverb placement: 'sometimes' is more natural between the auxiliary and main verb or after the auxiliary. Moving 'sometimes' to 'it can sometimes be' improves flow. Tense is present and correct, but word order needed adjustment.