Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and organize your answer: start with a direct short response, then add one or two specific details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., "because", "for example"). Mention which buildings and why they are notable.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there is a modern office tower and a large shopping mall close to my apartment, and my school is also in a multi-storey building. Because Hangzhou and Shaoxing are developing cities, new high-rises have been built in recent years.

提案: Answer directly then give one or two specific reasons and examples. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., "take photos of", "prefer to photograph"). Link ideas with "but" or "however" and keep sentences short.

例: I sometimes take photos of buildings, but I prefer photographing flowers and animals. For instance, I often visit parks to photograph flowers because I enjoy close-up details and bright colors rather than urban scenes.

提案: Start with a clear statement of which type or specific building you'd like to visit, then explain why with concrete details (history, architecture, or stories). Use correct tense and vocabulary: "I would like to visit" and "historic buildings have stories". Use linking words like "because" or "for example".

例: I would like to visit a historic building, such as an old temple or colonial-era house. For example, I am interested in ancient temples because they have unique architecture and many fascinating stories about the local culture.

提案: Give a clear yes/no first, then give specific reasons and a condition if needed. Correct grammar: "This depends on the elevator" and avoid fragments. Use linking words like "because" and "however". Mention pros and cons briefly.

例: I would prefer not to live in a tall building unless it has a reliable elevator. I don't like climbing many stairs every day, but if the building has a fast, well-maintained elevator and good facilities, I might consider it.

× Yes, definitely, because I live in Hangzhou and Shaoxing as a developing developed city so.

✓ Yes, definitely, because I live in Hangzhou and Shaoxing, which are developing cities.

The sentence misuses adjectives and has awkward structure. 'Developing developed' is contradictory and redundant. Use 'developing cities' to describe both places, and add a relative clause 'which are' to link it to the clause. Also add a comma for clarity.

× To building Niara, my school, my school and home.

✓ The tall buildings include my school, Niara Building, and homes near it.

Original phrase is fragmentary and lacks a clear verb and sentence structure. Rewriting as a full sentence clarifies the subject and what is being listed. Use parallel noun phrases and proper names (Niara Building) and plural 'homes' for consistency.

× I take the photo of the building, but I prefer to take the photo to pick a flower and animals or the show.

✓ I take photos of buildings, but I prefer taking photos of flowers, animals, or performances.

Use plural 'photos' for a habitual action and correct verb forms: 'prefer taking' or 'prefer to take'. Prepositions were incorrect: 'take the photo to pick a flower' is ungrammatical; use 'photos of flowers' etc. Also reorder items for clarity.

× Different city has different building and I perform to visit a some old building.

✓ Different cities have different buildings, and I plan to visit some old buildings.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice issues cause structure errors. Use plural 'cities' and 'buildings' and change 'perform to visit' to 'plan to visit'. Remove the unnecessary article 'a' before 'some'.

× I think it's especially and had a stories.

✓ I think they are especially interesting and have many stories.

Incorrect adjectives and verb forms: 'especially' needs an adjective like 'interesting'. 'Had a stories' mixes past tense and incorrect article; use present 'have' and plural 'stories'. Also match pronoun 'they' to 'buildings'.

× This depend on elevator cost.

✓ This depends on the cost of the elevator.

Verb agreement and noun phrase order are wrong. Use third-person singular 'depends' for 'this' and reorder to natural noun phrase 'the cost of the elevator'.

× I'm very lazy and I.

✓ I'm very lazy.

The original ends abruptly with an incomplete clause 'and I.' Remove the fragment to form a complete sentence. If additional idea is intended, complete the clause (for example 'and I don't want to climb stairs').

× Upstairs and downstairs every day so I don't like tall building but it's a have elevator expect.

✓ I would have to go up and down stairs every day, so I don't like tall buildings, but I would accept one that has an elevator.

Multiple tense and form issues: 'Upstairs and downstairs every day' is a fragment; express as 'have to go up and down stairs every day'. Use plural 'buildings'. 'It's a have elevator expect' is ungrammatical; change to 'I would accept one that has an elevator.' Ensure conditional/modal 'would' fits the hypothetical preference.