Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子有多处语法错误和用词不当，表达也有重复。需要用现在习惯时态（例如：I often look），修正动词短语（look out of the window），避免重复（不必两次说 especially），并补充连接词使句子更流畅。可以把主题句放在前面，随后给出具体细节并用连接词衔接。

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery is usually very beautiful. For example, I enjoy watching mountains and rivers passing by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

提案: 回答时有拼写和语法错误（card→car；The thing is→it is），并且结构重复。建议先给出直接回答，再用一到两句具体说明拍照的原因或例子，使用连接词如 because 或 for example。注意冠词和动词形式（I especially like taking photos）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it looks spectacular. For example, I like photographing mountains and rivers, and these pictures help me remember trips and feel relaxed.

提案: 句子存在重复和不连贯（I prefer to I prefer to；run mountains scenery；LO unclear），语法和词汇使用错误（help me relaxing→help me relax）。应明确表达偏好，给出理由并用恰当的连接词，避免无意义词。补充具体例子如拍照或徒步。

例: I prefer the mountains because the views are breathtaking and they help me relax. For instance, I enjoy hiking on mountain trails and taking photos of the scenery during peaceful mornings.

× Yes, I often took out the windows at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because the scenery is really spectacular especially.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by bus or car because the scenery is really spectacular.

句子使用了“took”这是过去式，但问句是一般现在时（Do you look…），所以需用一般现在时“look”。此外常用短语为“look out of the window”而不是“took out the windows”；“especially”位置不自然，应放在句尾或删去。这些修改保证时态一致并且搭配正确。

× I especially like watching mountains and rivers pass by and I find it relax and enjoy.

✓ I especially like watching mountains and rivers pass by, and I find it relaxing and enjoyable.

原句中缺乏正确的动名词或形容词形式。“find it relaxing and enjoyable” 使用形容词来描述感受更自然；“find it relax and enjoy”中“relax”应为现在分词或形容词“relaxing”，“enjoy”应为形容词“enjoyable”。同时在两个并列分句之间加逗号更清晰。

× Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the card window because The thing is really spectacular and I am especially like to take a photo with the mountains or rivers.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because the view is really spectacular and I especially like to take photos of the mountains or rivers.

原句有拼写错误“card window”应为“car window”。“The thing”表述不自然，应改为“the view”。“I am especially like to”语法错误，应为“I especially like to”或“I am especially keen to”。同时与“take photos”搭配应使用复数或不定式形式一致。注意大小写，句中不应随意大写“The”。

× I think it's really enjoyable and relaxing.

✓ I think it's really enjoyable and relaxing.

该句本身时态正确（一般现在时）且表达自然，因此无需修改。此处只确认为一般现在时的正确使用。

× I prefer to I prefer to run mountains scenery because it is really breathtaking and help me relaxing.

✓ I prefer mountain scenery because it is really breathtaking and helps me relax.

原句重复“I prefer to I prefer to”，为结构错误。短语“run mountains scenery”不合逻辑，应为“mountain scenery”。谓语“help”应与主语“it”或“mountain scenery”保持一致，使用第三人称单数“helps”。“help me relaxing”结构错误，应为“helps me relax”或“helps me to relax”。这些修改使句子结构清楚且语法一致。

× Sometimes I like to take some photos with LO with those scenery.

✓ Sometimes I like to take some photos of those sceneries.

原句中“with LO with”无意义且应移除。通常用“take photos of”来表示拍摄对象。“scenery”是不可数名词，指风景整体，用“those sceneries”不太自然，可改为“those scenery scenes”或更自然地保持不可数形式“the scenery”或“those views”。此处我改为“those sceneries”以贴近原意，但更地道的表达为“those views”或“the scenery”。