Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và ngắn gọn hơn; tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: "Yes, I do") rồi nêu lý do cụ thể và một chi tiết bổ sung. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, and). Chú ý động từ, danh từ và tính từ đúng hình thức (ví dụ: "comfortable" dùng để miêu tả cảm giác, nhưng phải hợp ngữ cảnh).

例: Yes, I do. I often look out of the window because I find the scenery relaxing, and it helps the journey pass more quickly. For example, I like watching trees and houses go by when I travel by bus.

提案: Cần tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời trả lời cụ thể hơn: có chụp ảnh hay không, khi nào và vì sao. Hãy dùng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, thêm một ví dụ cụ thể (khi nào bạn chụp, bằng điện thoại hay không). Tránh những từ không rõ nghĩa như "ioffer" hoặc "training landscape".

例: Sometimes I do. I usually take photos with my phone when the view is especially beautiful, for example of mountains or rivers, because I like to keep memories and share them with friends.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng lý do cụ thể và một so sánh ngắn. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (it makes me), dùng danh từ số nhiều khi cần (mountains) và thêm một chi tiết minh họa. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, rõ ràng và hợp lý.

例: I prefer the mountains because they make me feel relaxed after school. I enjoy the fresh air and quiet there, and I often go hiking to clear my mind, which helps me recharge better than a busy beach.

× Yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling because they have me more comfortable and closer furniture.

✓ Yes, I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling because it makes me more comfortable and feels closer to home.

The sentence uses the plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'looking out the window at the scenery,' which is incorrect; use 'it' to refer to the action or experience. Also verb forms are incorrect: 'have me more comfortable' should be 'makes me more comfortable.' Suggestion: use a singular pronoun matching the experience and the correct verb 'make' in third person singular ('makes').

× Is is hip the traveling more meaning.

✓ It makes traveling more meaningful.

This fragment has incorrect word order and nonstandard words ('Is is hip the traveling more meaning'). Correct structure: subject 'It' + verb 'makes' + object phrase. Use adjective 'meaningful' rather than 'meaning.' Suggestion: form a full clause with subject and verb and use correct adjective forms.

× Yes, ioffer lookout the window when I travel because it's make me feel relaxed and have has passed the time for exam.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel because it makes me feel relaxed and helps pass the time.

Multiple issues: 'ioffer lookout' is incorrect — likely intended 'I often look out.' Use 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window.' 'it's make' is wrong because 'it' requires third person singular verb 'makes.' 'have has passed the time for exam' is ungrammatical; use 'helps pass the time.' Suggestion: use correct adverb 'often,' proper verb forms, and a clear idiom 'pass the time.'

× I enjoy watching the training landscape and small shines out of the daylight.

✓ I enjoy watching the passing landscape and small glints in the daylight.

Words 'training landscape' and 'small shines' are incorrect collocations. Use 'passing' or 'rolling' landscape to describe scenery seen from a moving vehicle, and 'glints' or 'gleams' for small flashes of light. Also preposition 'in' fits better than 'out of' here. Suggestion: choose collocations that match natural English expressions.

× Well I prefer the mountain because it's make me feel relaxed after the school and I feel more comfortable.

✓ Well, I prefer the mountains because they make me feel relaxed after school and I feel more comfortable.

Use plural 'mountains' when speaking generally; then pronoun and verb must agree: 'they make' not 'it's make.' Also 'after the school' is unnatural in general statements—use 'after school.' Suggestion: match noun number with pronoun and verb, and omit 'the' before 'school' for general meaning.