Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然、简洁的句子直接回答问题，并在需要时提供一到两句具体原因或细节。注意语法（时态、人称）和用词搭配，避免重复和口语化错误。例如，把“I would like to have a sleep”改为“I prefer to sleep”或“I usually sleep”。保持回答不超过五句话，并用连接词（because, so, therefore）使表达更连贯。

例: I hardly ever look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. Typically, I prefer to sleep or catch up on homework because looking outside makes me feel bored and tired. Therefore, taking a nap is usually my best option.

提案: 回答要更连贯、语法更准确，并提供具体细节或例子。注意代词用法和句子结构（例如不要写“make this memory in my SO”）。使用连接词（but, however, so）来清楚地表达转折，并控制句子数量和长度。尽量给出一次具体拍照经历或频率。

例: Sometimes I take photos because the scenery can be very beautiful. However, I rarely do it while the car is moving because the pictures often turn out blurry. So I usually wait until we stop to take clearer photos.

提案: 直接陈述偏好并给出两到三个具体原因，注意用词准确（例如不要用“foresee”表达偏好），保持连贯性和句子简洁。使用连接词（because, so, and）来组织理由，并提供一两个具体的例子或经历来支持观点。

例: I prefer the sea because I love the colour blue and find the sound of waves very calming. I also enjoy swimming in the ocean more than hiking, and I find marine life fascinating, especially when I snorkel and see fish up close.

× Hardly ever because when I was travelling by bus or car I would like to have a sleep or do my homework because seeing outside is really bored I think and it made me feel really tired.

✓ Hardly ever, because when I travel by bus or car I would like to have a sleep or do my homework. Seeing the view outside is really boring, I think, and it makes me feel really tired.

问题类型：现在时使用不当。原句中时态混杂（使用了过去进行时“was travelling”和过去式“made”）而问句是在询问一般习惯，应使用现在时；另外形容词/动词形式错误（用“bored”描述景色，应为“boring”），主句和从句的时态要一致。建议：描述习惯性行为用一般现在时（travel → travel, make → makes），用“boring”描述使人觉得无聊的事物。

× The best true choice for me is to have a nice sleep.

✓ The best choice for me is to have a nice sleep.

问题类型：现在时使用不当与冗余词。虽然句子大体时态正确，但短语“true choice”不自然，且与上下文的现在时语境一致。建议：去掉“true”保留自然表达。

× Sometimes I do because the scenery outside is so beautiful.

✓ Sometimes I do, because the scenery outside is so beautiful.

问题类型：现在时使用不当（标点与节奏）。句子时态正确，但需要逗号分隔以提高可读性。建议：在“do”和“because”之间加逗号。

× I want to make this memory in my SO I would like to take some photos for them,

✓ I want to keep this memory for my SO, so I would like to take some photos for them.

问题类型：介词使用错误与连词错误。原句中“make this memory in my SO”介词搭配错误，应使用“keep/keep as a memory for”；同时句中缺少连接词，需用“so”表示因果。建议：使用固定搭配“keep this memory for someone”，并加上连词使句子通顺。

× but actually the photos can't see it really clear because the car is driving, so I don't take pictures really often.

✓ but actually the photos don't turn out very clearly because the car is moving, so I don't take pictures very often.

问题类型：被动/句子结构错误。原句“the photos can't see it”是错误的被动或拟人用法，应改为“the photos don't turn out (very) clearly”。“the car is driving”描述车辆移动不自然，改为“the car is moving”。建议：用“turn out”描述照片效果，用副词“clearly/very clearly”修饰。

× I would foresee because I like color blue and watching the sea waves can let me calm down.

✓ I would prefer the sea because I like the color blue, and watching the sea waves helps me calm down.

问题类型：情态动词/词汇使用错误。原句中“would foresee”用词错误，应为“would prefer”；“can let me calm down”不自然，改为“helps me calm down”。建议：使用固定短语“prefer the sea”，用“help”或“help someone do something”表达使某人平静。

× I like swimming in the ocean more than climbing the mountains.

✓ I like swimming in the ocean more than climbing mountains.

问题类型：介词/冠词使用错误。原句中“the mountains”可以简化为复数泛指“mountains”，不需要定冠词“the”。建议：使用泛指复数时省略定冠词。

× See, there are many sea animals in the sea and it was really interesting.

✓ There are many sea animals in the sea, and it is really interesting.

问题类型：现在时与过去时混用。上文在描述一般事实，应统一使用现在时；原句“was”应改为“is”。建议：描述事实或一般情况用一般现在时。