Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use one or two specific details with linking words. Correct errors like "on the car" → "in the car" and "watch out of the window" → "look out of the window."

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I don't like to sleep. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and city scenes, which makes long journeys feel shorter.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence, fix grammar and word choice, and add a brief reason. Use linking words (e.g., "because"), avoid redundant phrases, and keep to 2–3 supporting sentences.

例: Not often. I rarely take photos from the car window because I prefer to enjoy the view directly rather than photographing it, and I don't want to spend time posting images online.

提案: Give a direct answer, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Provide one or two specific reasons and a short example, using linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer the sea because it makes me feel relaxed and free. For example, I love swimming and walking along the beach, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× I actually don't like to sleep on the car so I usually watch out of the window to look at the landscape of the view.

✓ I actually don't like sleeping in the car, so I usually look out of the window at the landscape.

Incorrect use of the base verb 'to sleep' after 'don't like' — English uses the gerund (verb + -ing) after like/dislike when speaking generally. Also 'on the car' is wrong preposition; use 'in the car'. 'Watch out of the window to look at the landscape of the view' is wordy and awkward: 'look out of the window at the landscape' is concise and natural. Suggestion: use gerund after 'don't like' and correct prepositions ('in', 'out of', 'at').

× It's the most exciting things of traveling.

✓ It's the most exciting thing about traveling.

'Things' (plural) does not agree with singular 'the most exciting' in this context; use singular 'thing'. Also the correct preposition is 'about' to express what aspect is exciting. Suggestion: use singular noun after superlative when referring to one item and use 'about' for relation.

× I rarely take photo from the car window because I prefer watching it not taking photos and I don't really think it's a very necessary things to take photo to post online.

✓ I rarely take photos from the car window because I prefer watching, and I don't really think it's very necessary to take photos to post online.

Multiple errors: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally. 'It's a very necessary things' mixes singular and plural; use 'it's very necessary' or 'they are very necessary' — here remove 'a' and use 'necessary' as adjective. Also streamline 'prefer watching it not taking photos' to 'prefer watching'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context and avoid redundant articles.

× It's better to watch at the outside.

✓ It's better to watch from the outside.

Incorrect preposition 'at' and unidiomatic phrase 'the outside'. When referring to looking out from inside a vehicle, say 'from the outside' or better 'look out at the view' or 'just watch outside'. Suggestion: use 'from' to indicate origin and 'outside' without 'the' in this context.

× I prefer sea because it make me more relaxed and free and I really love swimming so I really hope that I can go to the sea and have fun and I really prefer to pass by the sea.

✓ I prefer the sea because it makes me more relaxed and free. I really love swimming, so I hope I can go to the sea and have fun; I especially like passing by the sea.

Several issues corrected: 'prefer sea' needs the definite article 'the sea' when speaking generally about that body of water. 'It make' is subject-verb agreement error corrected to 'it makes' (also matches ID 27 but primary here is article and agreement). 'I really hope that I can' is wordy; 'I hope I can' is natural. 'Prefer to pass by the sea' is awkward — 'like passing by the sea' or 'enjoy passing by the sea' is better. Suggestion: use 'the' with 'sea' in general preferences and ensure verb agrees with singular subject 'it'.