Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove redundant words (e.g., “look out for lookout the window” → “look out the window”).

例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus because the journeys are long and it helps pass the time. For example, I enjoy seeing small rural villages and unusual buildings along the route, which often remind me of childhood trips.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and more specific. Use linking words to connect reasons and results. Replace vague phrases like “change scenery” with clearer descriptions and correct collocations (e.g., “look beautiful,” “cherish memories”).

例: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because the passing scenery—fields, rivers and old houses—often looks beautiful. I usually print a few favorites and put them in a photo album so I can easily revisit those memories.

提案: Clarify the preference and correct word choice (e.g., “I prefer the sea” not “I prefer to see”). Give a concise reason and one specific detail, using linking words to connect ideas and correct tense use.

例: I prefer the sea because my hometown is near mountains, so going to the coast lets me feel the sea breeze and listen to the waves. The peaceful atmosphere helps me relax after a busy week.

× Yes, I always look out for lookout the window when I travel by bus because journey are usually long and it helps me pass the time.

✓ Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus because journeys are usually long and it helps me pass the time.

'look out for lookout the window' is incorrect: the correct phrasal verb is 'look out of the window' (preposition use and verb phrase). Also 'journey are' is a subject-verb agreement and pluralization issue: 'journeys are' or 'the journey is'. Here 'journeys' fits best. Suggestion: use 'look out of the window' and pluralize 'journeys' to match 'are'.

× I especially enjoy what the strange scenery and sporting small rural villages or interesting buildings along the route.

✓ I especially enjoy the strange scenery and spotting small rural villages or interesting buildings along the route.

The sentence uses 'what the' incorrectly and 'sporting' is a wrong word choice; 'spotting' (verb + -ing as gerund) correctly expresses noticing things. Change 'what the' to 'the' and 'sporting' to 'spotting'. This fixes sentence structure and word choice. Ensure 'spotting' is the correct -ing form to follow 'enjoy'.

× I like to take photos from the car window because change scenery often looks beautiful and it helps me remember special trips.

✓ I like to take photos from the car window because changing scenery often looks beautiful and it helps me remember special trips.

'change scenery' is incorrect; the correct noun form is 'changing scenery' (present participle used as adjective) to describe scenery that changes. Use 'changing' to modify 'scenery'.

× I usually print some of the best photos and put them in an album so I can look back those old memories.

✓ I usually print some of the best photos and put them in an album so I can look back on those old memories.

The verb phrase is 'look back on' when referring to remembering past events; omitting 'on' is incorrect. Also 'those old memories' is fine. Suggest adding the preposition 'on' after 'look back'. This corrects the phrasal verb usage (preposition error).

× I prefer to see because my hometown is near a mountain, so I enjoy going to the coast to feel the wind and listen to the sound of the waves.

✓ I prefer the sea because my hometown is near a mountain, so I enjoy going to the coast to feel the wind and listen to the sound of the waves.

'I prefer to see' is incorrect and unclear; the question asked 'Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?' so the correct reply is 'I prefer the sea.' 'Prefer' should be followed by a noun or gerund, not 'to see' here. Changing to 'I prefer the sea' fixes meaning and sentence structure.

× The peaceful atmosphere always helped me relax after a busy week.

✓ The peaceful atmosphere always helps me relax after a busy week.

The use of past tense 'helped' conflicts with 'always' which indicates a habitual present action; the present tense 'helps' is appropriate. Use 'helps' to show a recurring effect.