Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯且有很多重复和语法错误。要直接用一到两句主题句回答，然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意时态和主谓一致，避免重复表达；使用连接词（for example, because）使句子更流畅。举例说明你喜欢看什么风景或为什么喜欢看。

例: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching changing landscapes. For example, I like noticing old buildings and green fields because they help me relax and pass the time.

提案: 回答重复且含糊，缺少具体细节和连贯的逻辑。应先直接回答，再用一两句具体说明拍照的频率、原因和你通常拍什么，使用连接词如 because 或 so 来组织信息。注意名词复数和拼写（photo/photos, scenery 不加 s）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because the views are beautiful and change quickly. I usually photograph landscapes like mountains or old villages, then later choose the best shots to keep.

提案: 答案不相关且含混，未直接表明偏好并且有语法错误。应先直接说偏好（mountains or the sea），然后给出一到两条清晰具体的理由，用连接词（because, so）并避免无意义重复。举例说明你在海边或山区做什么以支持观点。

例: I prefer the sea because I enjoy eating fresh seafood and relaxing on the beach. For example, when I visit the coast I like walking by the shore and trying local seafood restaurants, which makes me feel relaxed.

× When I traveling, I like to look out the windows and then and I like to look out the window to look out the scenery because the scenery of the.

✓ When I am travelling, I like to look out of the windows and enjoy the scenery.

错误类型：动词＋-ing（进行时）问题。句中“When I traveling”缺少be动词，正确表达现在进行或习惯动作的结构应为“When I am travelling”或“I travel”。另外“look out the window”搭配不完整，常用表达是“look out of the window”。最后原句重复且句尾不完整。建议在描述习惯性动作时使用“I like to...”并保持句子简洁。

× I often take photo of the sceneries outside the card window because the scenery of the others window is very umm.

✓ I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it is very beautiful.

错误类型：量词和名词形式使用不当。“take photo”应为复数“take photos”；“sceneries”通常用不可数“scenery”；“card window”是拼写错误，应为“car window”；“the scenery of the others window”结构不正确且多余，使用“It”代替并用单数不可数名词更自然。建议使用“take photos of the scenery outside the car window”。

× It's very wonderful and beautiful. I want to.

✓ It is very beautiful and wonderful. I want to take photos of it.

错误类型：句子结构错误。原句断句不完整，“I want to.”后面缺补语，造成句子不完整。应补全动词宾语，例如“I want to take photos of it。”以完整表达意图。建议说完整的动词短语。

× Well, I often prefers the thing because I like to eat the seafood and then the the wings bites.

✓ Well, I often prefer the seaside because I like to eat seafood and the grilled wings.

错误类型：第三人称单数问题。主语“I”应搭配动词原形“prefer”，不能用“prefers”。此外“the thing”不清晰，应根据上下文改为“the seaside”或“the mountains/sea”等；“the wings bites”表达不自然，改为“grilled wings”或“chicken wings”。建议注意主语与动词的一致性并使用准确名词。

× The thing is very comfortable and then it's made me feel comfortable and it's very.

✓ The seaside is very relaxing and it makes me feel comfortable.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当。原句重复使用“comfortable”且结构不通顺，“it's made me feel comfortable”时态和语态不当，应为“it makes me feel comfortable”。最后一句不完整。建议用“relaxing”描述环境，用“It makes me feel...”来表达感受。