Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use present simple for habitual actions, correct verb forms, and clearer phrasing. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and add one linking word to connect ideas. Be specific about what you notice to enrich content.

例: Yes. When I travel in other countries, I often look out of the window because I enjoy watching people going about their daily lives and admiring unusual buildings. For example, I like seeing local markets and old architecture because they tell me about the local culture.

提案: Fix tense and word choice errors, avoid repetition, and make the reason more specific. Use a linking word to connect cause and effect. Keep it natural and within five sentences.

例: Yes. I often take photos of beautiful views from the car because I like recording my trips and preserving important moments. For instance, I frequently photograph coastal views or interesting street scenes so I can remember them later.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct phrasing: use simple, direct expressions and correct infinitive forms. Give a concise reason and a specific example, and use a linking word (e.g., because, and) to connect ideas naturally.

例: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the panoramic views from the peaks. For example, when I climb a mountain I can see both natural scenery along the trail and the city skyline in the distance, which makes the effort worthwhile.

× When I travel in different country, I enjoy watch outside the window when I was in transportation because I like the people doing things in their daily lives and admire the unique buildings in foreign country.

✓ When I travel in different countries, I enjoy watching out of the window while I am traveling because I like seeing people doing things in their daily lives and admiring the unique buildings in foreign countries.

Multiple preposition and related form errors: 'in different country' should be 'in different countries' (plural and use 'in' with countries but plural required) and 'in foreign country' should be 'in foreign countries'. 'Watch outside the window' is incorrect collocation; use 'watching out of the window' or better 'looking out of the window'. 'When I was in transportation' is awkward and inconsistent in tense; use 'while I am traveling' or 'while I am in transit'. Also verbs need gerund form after 'enjoy' ('enjoy watching'). Suggestions: use 'enjoy watching' or 'enjoy looking', use plural 'countries' or 'foreign countries', and use 'while I am traveling' for present habitual actions.

× Yes, I do take photos when I start a beautiful view in the car because I think recording my trip is enjoyable for me and let me memorize and memorize the important moment in my experience.

✓ Yes, I take photos when I see a beautiful view from the car because I think recording my trip is enjoyable and helps me remember important moments from my experience.

Errors: 'do take' is unnecessary emphasis in this context; simple present 'I take photos' is natural. 'Start a beautiful view' is incorrect verb; use 'see a beautiful view'. Preposition 'in the car' should be 'from the car' or 'out of the car window'. 'Let me memorize and memorize' is wrong: 'let me' plus verb is incorrect for intended meaning; use 'helps me remember' or 'allows me to remember'. Also remove duplicate 'memorize'. Use gerund 'recording' is fine. Suggestion: use 'helps me remember' for clarity and correct verb forms.

× I prefer mountains because I can not only recall the beautiful things along the mountain routes, but also watch the beautiful city views when I climb onto the peak of the mountain.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I can not only recall the beautiful sights along the mountain routes, but also see beautiful city views when I climb to the peak of a mountain.

Tense and collocation issues: 'prefer mountains' is acceptable but 'prefer the mountains' is more natural. 'Recall' is okay but 'recall the beautiful things' is vague; 'sights' is better. 'Watch the beautiful city views' is incorrect collocation; use 'see beautiful city views'. 'Climb onto the peak of the mountain' is wordy; use 'climb to the peak of a mountain'. Maintain present simple for habitual preference ('I prefer', 'I can') and use consistent article usage. Suggest using 'the mountains', 'sights', 'see', and 'climb to the peak'.