Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly addresses the question with supporting details. To improve further, shorten slightly to avoid redundancy and add one specific example to make it more vivid. Use a linking phrase when adding the example.

例: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by car or bus because it helps me relax and pass the time. For example, last month I watched the colorful markets in my hometown and found it really uplifting.

提案: Good content and a clear example, but avoid hesitation fillers (uh) and a small grammar point: use 'scenery' (uncountable) not 'sceneries'. Also the phrase 'suits my social personality' is unclear—replace with a concise reason. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word before the example.

例: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window, especially when I visit new places because I enjoy photography. For instance, a month ago I photographed Calgary’s skyline from the car, which produced some lively shots.

提案: Clear and concise response with reasons. Fix a small grammar error ('give' → 'gives') and replace the informal connector 'More than that' with a smoother linking phrase like 'Moreover' or 'Additionally'. You could add one brief specific detail about a mountain activity to enrich the answer.

例: I prefer the mountains because the fresh air and beautiful scenery are very relaxing. Moreover, hiking there gives me good exercise and a welcome break from my busy lifestyle, such as when I climb a local trail on weekends.

× I often take photos of sceneries outside the car window, especially when I'm traveling to new places or during my holidays because I love doing photography.

✓ I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when I'm traveling to new places or during my holidays because I love photography.

The word 'sceneries' is incorrect in English; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun (singular form only). Also 'doing photography' is awkward; the correct collocation is 'love photography' or 'enjoy taking photographs'. Suggest replacing 'sceneries' with 'the scenery' and 'doing photography' with 'photography' to sound natural.

× For example, a month ago I captured some photographs of, uh, Calgary City.

✓ For example, a month ago I captured some photographs of Calgary.

Place names do not usually take a countable noun like 'City' after them unless part of the official name. 'Calgary City' is unnecessary and unnatural; use 'Calgary'. Removing 'City' makes the sentence correct and natural.

× More than that, hiking there also give me a good exercise and a break from a busy lifestyle.

✓ More than that, hiking there also gives me good exercise and a break from a busy lifestyle.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: the singular verb should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'hiking' (gerund as singular). Also 'a good exercise' is incorrect because 'exercise' in this context is uncountable; use 'good exercise' without 'a'. Suggest using 'gives me good exercise'.