Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and natural but a little repetitive and contains minor grammar issues. Keep answers concise (no more than five sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct small grammar errors (use "when we travel" rather than "when we are traveling" in this context) and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

例: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy watching mountains and countryside because the changing scenery helps me relax. For instance, on long journeys I like to spot different villages and fields along the way.

提案: The response is too brief and grammatically incorrect. Provide a full sentence as a direct answer, then add a reason or short detail using a linking word. This will make your reply more fluent and informative. For example, say "No, I don't take photos" and explain why.

例: No, I don't usually take photos from the car window because reflections and motion blur make the pictures poor. Instead, I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes or take photos when we stop somewhere.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is unclear and contains informal fillers and awkward phrasing (e.g. "nonsense", "imaginary"). Begin with a clear preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid hesitation words like "uh" and choose precise adjectives (e.g. "awe-inspiring" instead of "imaginary").

例: I prefer the mountains because they feel awe-inspiring and peaceful. For example, standing at the foot of a tall peak makes me reflect on how small we are, and I enjoy hiking and the fresh air.

× Yes, I really like to see the mountains and the views from our window when we are traveling, so I usually look out of the window. So yes, I like to see it in the window side.

✓ Yes, I really like seeing the mountains and the views from the window when I am travelling, so I usually look out of the window. I like to see them from the window.

The sentence has issues with verb form and pronoun/reference. Use the gerund 'seeing' after 'like' for habitual preferences (present tense). Use 'the window' rather than 'our window' to match general context and 'I am travelling' instead of 'we are traveling' to match the speaker. 'It' is incorrect referring to plural 'mountains and views' so use 'them' and rephrase 'in the window side' to 'from the window' for natural preposition use. Suggested improvement: use 'like + -ing' for likes (I like seeing...), ensure pronouns agree in number, and use natural prepositions ('from the window').

× Don't take photos.

✓ I don't take photos.

The original is missing the subject pronoun 'I', which makes the sentence ungrammatical. In spoken answers you must include the subject for clarity. Use the auxiliary 'do' plus negation 'not' in the present simple: 'I don't take photos.' Suggested improvement: include the subject and follow standard negative present-simple structure: subject + do/does + not + base verb.

× Uh, nonsense because I really like to see the highest mountain and compare myself, my size, uh, with the mountains and can't believe that all the nature is so imaginary and beautiful that we are very small.

✓ That's difficult to answer, but I really like looking at tall mountains and comparing my size with them; I can't believe how incredible and beautiful nature is and how small we are in comparison.

This sentence has multiple structural and word-choice problems. 'Nonsense because' is unclear; better to start with a linking phrase. Use 'looking at' (gerund) after 'like'. 'Compare myself, my size, with the mountains' is awkward; use 'comparing my size with them'. 'Can't believe that all the nature is so imaginary' is incorrect: 'imaginary' is wrong word choice and 'all the nature' is not natural; use 'incredible' or 'amazing' and 'nature' without 'all'. Join ideas with clear connectors and correct verb forms to maintain present tense. Suggested improvement: simplify and sequence ideas, use appropriate adjectives (incredible, amazing), and ensure pronoun and verb agreement.